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Love
was just
a word said
but never felt.
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Spoken freely but
not with much sincerity,
language with no clarity,
from tongues of habit.
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My heart wishes
to just once
know true
love.
*
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***
****
***
**
*
Hate
present
each day is
so slow to kill.
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Dying piece by piece,
an inner selfs outer shell,
crumbled as this lady fell
- bitter and broken.
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My soul wishes
nevermore
to feel
hate
*
Author notes
Arkquain String - a form developed by Arkbear:
(single Arkquain)
12 lines with ( 1 ) break between
each stanza, a total of ( 2 ) breaks,
and a total of ( 3 ) stanzas.
The two ( 7 ) syllable lines, must use *end* Rhyme.
Syllable count is:
1-2-3-4
break
5-7-7-5
break
4-3-2-1
Image found at deviantART.com, artist Ana Cruz
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A contest entry
- Four years and counting.... by LionessK.
600 points, ended April 30, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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You've been Hoodwinked!
A beautiful illustration of love and hate. You portrayed love without going mushy, and hate without sounding stupid. I love it! The dashes (or whatever they're called) were helpful in separating the groups of words. Your flow was dead on, and the picture really looked good too. A great write!
~M~
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I love the flow of this.. and how you have written it out, the spaces and ~~~ etc.
and I can relate well to the feeling.
Great picture also, it fits well with your words.
~Kristy
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Standing Ovation!
Lori ~
This is most impressive ~
The message speaks volumnes and
the picture is splendid ~
As far as the Form goes....well......
if I ever croak, I want you to have it ~
You show great entusiasm for perfecting the Arkquain and
I have stood in awe at each one you have penned ~
You have the ability to see the words placed into this form
before you even get to the next line....
....that takes a heck of a lot of talent to do that ~
There is nothing to critique about this write ~
The message truely is a piece of Art in itself ~
You have outdone yourself with this Sis ~
The best to you in this contest....
.....and hopefully it will win the GOLD....
....truely deserving ~
Brother Bear ~
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Thanks for the wonderful review, Bear! Your lovely words are more powerful than my coffee this morning!
I'm getting quite addicted to your form, ya know! I actually have written a couple more pieces, just haven't posted them yet, but when I do, you'll be asked for your feedback again! 
~Lori
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Wow Lori this is such an interesting form of poetry and done so brilliantly by you. And a very heartfelt message you have installed with it. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Love ya,
Charley
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Thanks Charley! Your sweet comment is much appreciated!
~Lori
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Very nice and artistically presented as well, I have yet to try one of these neat forms by our new member, but will try one soon. Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e *
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Thanks Lady Peg! Much appreciated!
~Lori
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Wonderful!!
Powerful message conveyed and of course Beautiful in form!
Love this my Friend
Emotions felt and Touches...
Thank You for sharing Your Talent!
Best wishes to You in the contest
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Thanks so very much for the lovely comment, Desire! It is most appreciated!
~Lori
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Wonderful
This is so unique and sounds a lot like haiku, or the eastern poetry. Very nice and I am very impressed!
Auntie Wolfie YBF
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Thanks Auntie Wolfie! I am enjoying this form developed by Arkbear! It is unique and challenging, not just a simple cinquain or etheree.
~Lori
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Lovely verse.... what a profound message and I love the form and flow! Wow! This is really beautiful!
Blessings and best wishes,
Frogz~
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Thanks Frogz! Much appreciated! I love this form Brother Bear developed and I've had fun playing around with it this week!
~Lori
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Breathtaking!!
Such a beautifully written piece I am never amazed by your talent Lori but I am always captivated by your words. You simply brought this picture to life with each line. Another well written piece!!
Take care Sis!
Shannon
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Thanks so much, Shannon! Your wonderful comment is most appreciated. It's so great to see you back, I've missssssssed you! Love ya, Sis!
~Lori
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