isn't it lonely above the atmosphere, floating alone somewhere
space stations aren't safe havens
you seem gray and distant
it's in your eyes and on your face
why don't you rejoin us on the face of earth
space cadet come down to earth
floating into nowhere
floating into nowhere
Please tell me what you think
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I like it... especially the lack of punctuation. It adds to the distant, isolated feel. It's definitely a relatable piece - almost everyone has either known someone who seemed distant, or has been the distant person, possibly both. At the same time, it isn't cliche at all - this is a really cool, unique way to describe it, and one that fits perfectly. I'm quite taken by it, Chad. Love ya!
~Kels
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I heart it.
Fix the misspelling at the end.
ever listen to "looking for astronauts" by the national?
you should.
i have a lot of time on my hands.
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love the metaphore....well, at laest thats what i hope it is...if not then i would feel silly....thoughtful for it's size. nicely penned
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little, different. succinct...dug it
This seemed like a departure from some of your other work. Of course, I dig you other stuff too but this one was somehow...different, less abstract but in a good way. Sorry for the lack of adjectives, i guess i'm still tired...Anyway, i really got the sense of isolation from your very succinct descriptions. Well done.
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very nice
I liked that you compared astronauts to someone who is distant in everyone's lives. It must be lonely up there among the stars...
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