standing there in those
-same old- faded blue jeans
wearing that goddamn green button-up shirt
with a wife beater underneath
you always fucking wear
sunburnt skin replaces the familiar
pasty white
& it’s spring, darling
you’re talking to me
n’ all I can think is maybe..
god, I want something more
but with an innocent smile
plastered so carelessly across your face
i’ll watch you walk away from me again…
& here we are
a sudden slip from
where we used to be
a year ago
the seasons, they’ve changed
i’ve changed too
but these feelings of remorse
don’t ever really fade
[[..at.least.one.of.us.can.be.happy..]]
it’s getting better
at least, I feel this has enhanced me
I am stronger for it
looking in the mirror
it isn’t as hard as it used to be
& I’m much calmer now that I can look at you
knowing how much you still mean to me
& it’s ok we’re apart
[[..what.is.meant.to.be.will.be.and.nothing.else.matters..]]
but, as the reasons why ravel off my tongue
the words you wrote still sting
i realize I’m only kidding myself
you don’t know what it’s like to hurt..
& you’ll never realize
just how much
>>>>>>
I
love[d]
you
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Author notes
" i hate the way u laugh, i hate the way u smile ,i hate the way u talk, i hate the way u look , i hate the way u dress, i hate u way u walk, i hate the way u r , i hate everything about u , especially the way u made me think i had a chance."
*inspired by Blue October's Everlasting Friend & my life*
(option 4)
A contest entry
- Options!!!! Anything goes. by Jaffa-.
550 points, ended December 10, 2008, 52 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
comments always appreciated
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This was really great. Dirty Pretty. I think..... My favourite
I really liked it and i'd like to congradulate you. It was very good and i loved the emotion and layout. -
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i guess if you had to categorize it. thanks for the awesome comment and for holding this contest.
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I understand so much how you feel...only it's only been a few months for me and he still avoids me like the plauge
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wow. absolutely beautiful. it had so much meaning and all this really is a beauty. i loved the last part. it was just so...so...amazing. good luck!
>>>>>>
I
love[d]
you
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thank you so much. this is a really personal piece. i'm so glad you like it!
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A very pretty write, hun. It's really sad but at the same time, very bittersweet. I really liked the:
"but with an innocent smile
plastered so carelessly across your face
i’ll watch you walk away from me again…"
It's very sad and gives such a good image of my last boyfriend's face when he said we couldn't be together anymore. Thank you for entering and good luck!! ^_^
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This is sad and I really like it! You did a wonderful job and I can relate. Best of luck
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Aw, this is a sad piece. Sometimes even when they do know ... they act as if they never found out, sadly.
"but these feelings of remorse
don’t ever really fade
[[..at.least.one.of.us.can.be.happy..]]"
--I feel this way. Aw, I'm a little sad now
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Very intense and honest! great write!
Blessed be,
Azlyn
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outstanding poem, your writings are really good. keep it up
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I
love[d]
you
how bittersweet. this poem is sad and shows the speaker's loyalty
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good stuff. really good.
and i love that song too. blue october rocks
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marvelous
I've definitely felt like this before. A love that you know is meant to be, but he just can't see it... Very well written. You don't need to use too many words to convey what you feel, which I like. Good luck in the contest you've entered.
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