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Sewer-Dreams

Blood-red roses and ivory-white lilies
Fall .s.l.o.w.l.y. through the sewer-drain cracks
Seeping and soupy with +refuse+ and waste
Muddy and gooey with newspapers & chemicals
The flaking-residue of face-peels and orange-peels
Mannequin hands and broken bottles mingle like party-goers
In the hopes that someone-somewhere-will claim them
Never finding their way, never being loved except by
that eager sewer-comber;; resplendent in his ~rags~ of flannel
Plastic bags tied around his chaffed feet protect him
from the rats and broken dreams;; speaking of broken dreams:
Why did you never-ever-wander my way?
I must have spoken to you .onethousandandthirtytwo. times
…Of closed doors and virginity torn astray…
Why-oh-why do you taunt me with your lovely eyes
&& hair of moonshine silk?
Must you be so [Glam]orous?
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//Love is blind, as far as the eye can see//

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i usualy don't like the poems that i write. but this one's pretty good (in my opinion)

this is the first poem i actually think is amazing!

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  • Why-oh-why do you taunt me with your lovely eyes
    && hair of moonshine silk?
    Must you be so [Glam]orous?
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    //Love is blind, as far as the eye can see//


    My favorite part.
    really liked the title as well.

  • Chainsaw
    July 9, 2008
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    I liked the last line.

  • HollyxHavok
    October 2, 2007

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    LOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVE IT!!!

    virginity torn astray…
    That is beautiful...
    It reminds me of someone wallowing in the pain of a sex crime...
    But all the same it spoke to me and
    it almost felt like it was directed toward me.


  • AshliiAsphyxiation
    May 4, 2007
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    this is fab honney, the lights of hollywood could never outshine you;

    Why did you never-ever-wander my way?
    I must have spoken to you .onethousandandthirtytwo. times
    …Of closed doors and virginity torn astray…
    Why-oh-why do you taunt me with your lovely eyes
    && hair of moonshine silk?
    Must you be so [Glam]orous?


    b.e.a.utiful dalring


    xoxo


  • Shantalina
    April 27, 2007
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    oh yea, forgot the important part! ily


  • Shantalina
    April 27, 2007

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    OMG YOUR FABULOUS BBY!

    Why did you never-ever-wander my way?
    I must have spoken to you .onethousandandthirtytwo. times
    …Of closed doors and virginity torn astray…
    Why-oh-why do you taunt me with your lovely eyes
    && hair of moonshine silk?
    Must you be so [Glam]orous?
    .
    .
    .

    .
    .
    .
    //Love is blind, as far as the eye can see//



    Your so fabulous darling, and ily so much!! This is great, and those lines ^^^ are what really grabbed my attention, this poem is fab, and I love it! Keep it up bby! ily!

    Xx

  • BArBiE slaPPed m3
    April 24, 2007

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    Gah! You're amazing. I'd put my favorite part down but that'd be the whole thing. I love you!
    xoxo,
    Your Dumpster Doll


  • oh willoughby
    April 23, 2007

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    "In the hopes that someone-somewhere-will claim them"

    well
    in MY opinion

    it FUCKING ROCKS!!!

    love this poem Plastic!


  • xshotxinxthexheartx
    April 23, 2007
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    OhMyGod

    This was absolutley amazing!


    And, Yes This was by far, your best, and I really love it.


    <3<3--XxShotxX


  • makeout kid
    April 23, 2007

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    you are right;;
    this is amazing.
    i absolutely adore the imagery.

    beautiful job hunni.


  • PaperChainHearts
    April 23, 2007

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    Why-oh-why do you taunt me with your lovely eyes
    && hair of moonshine silk?
    Must you be so [Glam]orous?
    .
    .
    .

    .
    .
    .
    //Love is blind, as far as the eye can see//


    mmmmmmmm bby this is amazing, I lovelovelove it♥

  • InfiniteCaitlin
    April 23, 2007

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    Muddy and gooey with newspapers & chemicals
    The flaking-residue of face-peels and orange-peels
    Mannequin hands and broken bottles mingle like party-goers
    In the hopes that someone-somewhere-will claim them
    Never finding their way, never being loved except by
    that eager sewer-comber;; resplendent in his ~rags~ of flannel


    I love it bb doll, you are such an amazing poet, and I think all your stuff is amazing, awesome job!!!!!!


  • KissMeGoodnight
    April 23, 2007
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    haha, you are very right!! this is very well done!
    'Blood-red roses and ivory-white lilies' woo hoo! i love that line aaand
    'virginity torn astray…' haha great job! i always love your stuff, another great poem added to your wall of coolness lol

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