tissues flutter
desperate in sticky nets of menace
till their own flesh
becomes a hollow imprint
hanging from silver strings
to adorn her dress
of knitted skeletons
Author notes
http://allpoetry.com/images/ext/Contest/2347/930.jpg?1177324960
Prompt: "Dark Butterflies"
A contest entry
- treasure chest for quickie prewrites by DancingRed.
300 points, ended July 9, 2007, 32 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Dark and gory descriptions (but I still think there's beauty in your poem); your images are magically powerful.
This makes a great short piece, and you haven't wasted words by filling it up with unneeded chaff.
Each word is a gem, and adds so much to the overall piece.
Thank you thank you for entering.
DancingRed.
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thank you so much! i'm much honoured for the silver! 
thanks for the great comment!
bless ya!
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Wonderful
Terrific images you have compressed into a short poem. Very well done.
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oh, thanks so much! i like the idea here myself, though nasty it may seem.
bless ya!
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Short but Sweet
I like, nice use of imagery, well done! -
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doggy or dannyog? dannyog's better..
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thanks!!
doggy!!! *ruffles your head*
sorry m out of touch.. how are you?
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AWESOME!! Imagery is perfect!! But I am sad u were late to join this!! Its an excellent piece! Awe inspiring!
Keep it up!
preets
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ah.. lol.. yep! it's like i clicked into it.. but penman beat me to the place at the exact same time!
ah vell.. thanks anyway!
bless ya!
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