awakened from death to life
life more abundant and free
free to be the one I was created to be
be true, honest, and full of hope
hope in more to come than this body
this body has been wasted
wasted away to nothing and yet...
and yet in it's dying I now can see
see, I was blind and bound
bound to act upon my feelings
feelings of despair and sorrow
sorrow flees from the light
light of the sun, moon, and stars
stars rekindled with power
power to rise even from the dead
the dead have no mourning
mourning and sighing pass away
away from the ashes beauties arise
arise beloved soul into the fullness
the fullness of love that casts down all fears
fears have no place here
here is wholeness and healing
healing for secret shame and guilt
guilt and condemning no more
more is to come upon balmy wings
wings unfurled in first light
light gives way to true life
life more abundant and free.
Author notes
I chose to write about my thoughts and feelings evoked from the picture.
with stair progression, i think that's what it's called when you use the last word of one line for the beginning of the next. haven't done that in a while so i thought i'd give it a try.
I got disqualified for not putting in my notes that i had read the rules... go figure.
anybody been to band camp?
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Excellant/joyful
A very fine write indeed. I liked it just as it is. In fact, it reminds me of the following poem "Salutation of the Dawn", link:
http://demelza.sphosting.com/Salutation.html
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good
Dq? - F**k sake, we have a langauage use it! - anyway good stuff, I like these sort of try out peices, might have worked better as a shorter piece and some lines like 'to be true, honest, and full of hope' you could have cut out the 'to' - like this though good piece of creativity.
Works well.
James
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as i was going over your poem again
Im sorry to say that i have to dq u because you did not follow all the rules i love your style and im sorry to have to dq you for this...thank you so much for entering...frances -
love this style
i love the way you have pened this poem....best wishes and good luck in the contest , as ever frances -
wow really great poem with strng emotions...nice write
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Hi
I like the way you link each line with the last word, and im glad to see you are on the road that you want to be on
Michael
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