For everytime I see your face,
I fall back into a place.
Which wonder dares to show its grace.
With hopes and dreams seering through my mind,
I find somehow I can't unwind.
With every thought of you around,
I feel that I am somehow bound.
Feeling that I am not myself,
I know somehow that I need help.
Needing to let go of you,
I know I must bid you adieu.
Every thought I have of you must now go,
The love I have the wind will blow.
When tonight I dream my dreams,
A glimmer of you will somewhere stream.
I let go now and wish you well,
I hope that everything goes swell.
So goodbye my love now forever,
I won't remember you whatsoever......
Author notes
I haven't found the inspiration to finish this. It started off so good then......BLAH. Well I tried so let me know if you think it sucks cause I didn't like it as much as I thought I would. "PURPLE" OPTION 4
A contest entry
- Make me Feel Something by Kristin Melissa.
525 points, ended April 28, 2007, 23 entries
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One quick thing before I forget it again. Instead of "ado", do you mean "adieu"? It would just make more sense to me then.
I've finally managed to accomplish what this poem is about. Took me four years, lots of talking to, a psychic, and time for it to finally be done. (Don't ask about the psychic. It was a dare.) Lots of emotion packed into this piece, but I feel like it's missing images of what you're trying to say. But that could just be me being tired. (Two days without sleep is not recommended... now I know why.) I did like it though. Nicely done.
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Is that the way you spell it I used spell check and it didn't come up. So I figured that it was ok. Thank you for the correction. This piece is about finally letting go of my ex. You know your first love, you will always have feelings for. I have finally made my peace, with the fact that he cheated on me, and I had wondered about him every now and then but I finally decided that I needed to let go of the past and quite wondering if he has made it in life or, things like that. I had always felt this bond or connection to him, and I felt like the fact that I couldn't get him out of my mind meant that I would be forever bound to him in someway. It isn't true though you can always let go. A final good bye is what I wanted to make the title.
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this was good...the rhyming seemed a little expected their wasn't really a wow effect but the concept itself was great....You wrote with alot of feeling....and wrote it very well....but it would give it so much more if the rhyming was like a bang' ya know....like unexpected for a lack of a better worf...anywho.....keep writting your very talented and good luck in the contest
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Ok this is really good, I love it but you didn't add the opt you used so Please fix it or I'll have to DQ you...
~*~ Mystic
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