You're the one my heart desire
Fuel by love, you`ve set me on fire
Feeling your warm body next to mine
Sends shivers up and down my spine
Our bodies touch, our lips embrace
The moon shines upon your beautiful face
You devour my thoughts, you're in my mind
Your gentle touch is one of a kind
You whisper words of wisdom in my ears
When I cry you wipe away my tears
You gave me hope when all was dark
On my heart you left your mark
You gave me your love, my inspiration
And to you my love, I give my dedication
God sent a messenger from up above
He brought one arrow filled with your love
Cupid aims, shooting his arrow into my heart
In that moment I knew we would never part
With you I found strength to move on with life
I found courage to say "Yes I will be your wife
Author notes
I have read the entire contest page.option number 1 Hope you like this.
A contest entry
- For My Love by Tammy Knott.
300 points, ended May 6, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - How does "First Love" feel like by cali951.
335 points, ended May 27, 2007, 14 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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awww how romantic. i love this one a lot. i love everything about this one. there is no part in particular i like. i love it all.
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This is very romantic and beautiful. It sounds like the relationship I am in right now. You did really well with the ryhming and the flow was really good. Great write!
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Thank you for your lovely comment. I would have to say this one is my favorite Thanks for reading
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This is very romantic and very true... I can relate to this. I hope your love stays strong and meaningful for a long time after this comment is written. Love always and keep writing from your heart.
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Thank you for reading me poem. I love writing about my feelings
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You have penned such a tender devotion of love. How very sweet this is. The whole piece is lovely but the last two lines really brought this home. Taking the final step is very scary and I like that you acknowledge it. Wonderful work.
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Aww, this is such a sweet write. Filled with love and warmth. I can most certainly relate to the feelings you portrayed. Thanks for sharing.
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With you I found strength to move on with life
I found courage to say "Yes I will be your wife
wow this's romantic,gentle and quite touchy and I do hope you'll live happy ever after amen cause true love that's crowened with marriage's really rare these days and yes it takes lots of courage to take this marriage step best of wishes to u both may yr love live forever amen -
Amazing!
You gave me your love, my inspiration
And to you my love, I give my dedication
God sent a messenger from up above
He brought one arrow filled with your love
Cupid aims, shooting his arrow into my heart
In that moment I knew we would never part
With you I found strength to move on with life
I found courage to say "Yes I will be your wife
Man this is amazing!
Great job.
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Wow. I really like this. It's so deep. Great write and good luck in the contest.
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This a a great read.. the rhythm is on point.. There is a good visula feel to your words as well. The title is fitting well as your background choice.. I luv these lines state a lot in such few words.. committed
"You gave me hope when all was dark
On my heart you left your mark"
iculookn
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Liked the rhythm and rhyme, flow of these lines; the thoughts shared of how you feel about someone. Sentiments expressed well in this poem;
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nice poeem good job and good luck in my contest
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Thank you for having this contest. I love writing about the things in my life. I'm not very good with showing or telling people that i care about how I feel so write instead. Once again thank you
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Thank you for your entry
Very nice. I can feel the love. To become someones wife and share your lives together is a big commitment. It doesn't always last but reading these lines makes me sure yours will.
Thanks for the read and good luck.
God Bless
Tammy -
Very Good
Our bodies touch, our lips embrace
The moon shines upon your beautiful face
You devour my thoughts, you're in my mind
Your gentle touch is one of a kind
Lovely words made in great care
Rick
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Thank you for reading my poem. I'm new here. Sorry for taking so long to reply.
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