I won’t be taken in!
Nor will my bulging brood of bands be interwoven there
to draw another in.
In this I will not falter,
though fault, or fear, or love aloof entice me.
A contest entry
- Five lines - Amaze me... by Lavender Butterfly.
390 points, ended April 22, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Hey, nice work! Great thesis or whatever you wanna call it with the first line! Just that line alone is pretty powerful. and line two has great alliteration with those B's. The last two lines wrap up nicely the whole metaphor. keep 'tup!
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Love it
I would repeat these words over and over, infact I should.
Powerfully well written. Love the metaphor of the web.. haunting write
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Great metaphor and strong imagery... x Thanks for sharing. Love and light, Butterfly.
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Metaphorically magnificent
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