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Wishing

Missing image
Caress
of angel wings
against my upturned face,
as dandelion releases
my wish.

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cinquain

Graphic: http://www.skiptonfs.co.uk/NAHT/images/dandyBlow.jpg

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  • Everwind Rising
    April 24, 2007

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    This piece is simple and beautiful. You paint a vivid picture with emotinal content with very few words. Nicely done. I think the inclusion of the word "upturned" in line 3 enhances this whole piece so well. The upturned face inspires thoughts of heaven, positive outlook, and hope. In a short piece like this one word often changes the tone of a piece or in this case enhances it so much. Brilliant word choice!


  • ten thousand cicadas gold member
    April 22, 2007
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    congrats!

    My favorite in the contest. So light, simple, pure. Love it!


  • Lavender Butterfly silver member
    April 22, 2007

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    How sincerely beautiful and just breathtaking... x Thanks for sharing. Love and light, Butterfly.


  • DJ Harley silver member
    April 22, 2007

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    a lovely 5 line poem susi. I used to do that with dandilions it was so much fun.
    good luck in the contest

    your friend John


  • sheltered
    April 22, 2007
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    Nice imagery. Super Cinquain.

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