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Compassionate Savior

Kindness and compassion are what you cajole,
Assisting those you perceive as in need;
A beacon to the weary soul.

With insurmountable self-control,
Gaurding your tongue as you proceed,
Kindness and compassion are what you cajole.

Even as the silence takes its toll,
You create a new and unspoken creed;
A beacon to the weary soul.

Enjoying the times that are droll
With comfort of a different breed.
Kindness and compassion are what you cajole.

The little-yet, most important-things you constantly dole,
Helping and saving me as they supersede;
A beacon to the weary soul.

Only to God you extol,
While on a path of truth you lead.
Kindness and compassion are what you cajole;
A beacon to the weary soul.

Author notes

Yet another Villanelle. Only my second one, but it could still be better. I wrote this one for a friend also, just not the same one. Well, enjoy I suppose.

For Lady: I wrote this for my friend Kalie Alinger

For Confused: I chose option 6.

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  • SmartBrick
    June 6, 2008
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    I liked this one!IT is really good...well of course it is...because it won the most trophies so it must be good!Thank u millions for entering!

    signed confused


  • Passionate Phoenix
    October 22, 2007

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    well done on your previous trophies good poet, some interesting wording here, enjoyed reading this one, well done xx


  • Glasyalabolas
    October 17, 2007

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    I have never used villanelle before and this is the first example I've had the chance to read, but the style and repitition works really well.

    Nice, heartfelt poem. Good write and congrats on bronze.


  • Crazy-Dan
    September 3, 2007

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    vocab good from the first line and i'm seeing a pattern from skimming it "Kindness and Compassiona are what you cajole", i'll deside after i read it if you over did this great line.

    After reading I noticed another line that you repeated "A beacon to the weary soul" i liked that.

    This poem its vocab was too high and i understood little of it. I'm going to put it in finalist list for now because i liked what i understood, and i'll look up words when i have time.
    This honestly has a good chance, just for the high vocab alone here's examples of vocab i haven't seen ever before that i liked...
    cajole
    unsurmountable
    creed
    droll
    doll
    supersede
    extrol

    if you give me defs for this i would be greatful, if not i can see why not, either way good job with this on


  • Nereida Nightshade
    August 19, 2007
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    Oh this is so sweet and so full of love. Well done thanks for entering!


  • Swan song gold member
    July 8, 2007

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    This is very beautiful i loved it very much thank you for entering this is a very lovely ppoem I will be reading this again.


  • Heavens Child
    April 23, 2007

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    I definately like this style of poem.... it takes a certain kind of writer to pull it off. You've done a wonderful job with this. Thanks for the entry in my contest.

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