We used to flirt with each other,
I'd think of you as more then a friend.
Strange how everything works out,
strange how beating hearts can end.
We grew the deepest love,
truly everything was meant to be.
Two hearts joined in feeling,
something I could never see.
But then you broke that promise,
you said you never would do.
Though you did what you did,
leaving me cold and blue.
And I am on the outside,
Trying so hard to get back in.
Broken hearted, pain never-ending,
just trying to forget again.
The phone rang sounding so distant,
caller ID said it was you.
Your words sounded like a sorry,
But what's there for me to do?
I bleed pain from your actions,
pretending it's making me stronger.
Can't hold this ache inside,
can't hold it any longer.
So I'll come back to you,
though I'm not finished crying.
But don't you ever hurt me again,
don't even think of trying.
Author notes
Words can't even explain.
A contest entry
- ~Update~ Give me whatever you got! by lizwicker.
950 points, ended April 8, 2008, 43 entries
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Comments
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Emotional write that to me expressed all the feelings oe might feel after someone breaks their heart. The pain, the sadness, the confusion.
Nice write.
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This is full of emotion and confusion, It was a very nice write in expressing how you feel!! I'm very sorry about the situation!! I couldn't find anything wrong with it though, you are a very talented writer.
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"And I am on the outside,
Trying so hard to get back in."
These are definitely my favorite lines, they speak so deeply of what this poem is about. You obviously loved the guy and still have such strong feelings for him, and even if you don't want to have these feelings for him, some part of you wants him back. This is a very strong poem, that conveys a great deal of emotion, or pain, or anger and sadness. I feel your pain through this piece of writing and am very sorry. I hope everything works out the way YOU want it, with or without him in the picture.
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Wow Talented Ink!
ew..I bleed pain. Wow! Nice rhym at the end a very good follow up. No comment on the relationship thing. I'm all done. Every time I open my mouth or pen for that matter I seem to catch it.
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