VERSE ONE
I thought I was getting something good:
Really good.
Ah-oh.
I’ve figured out since then that looks deceive,
And this abriev-iation
Is my desolation.
CHOROUS
If I could fly away from here
And find a place to stand;
I can think clearer on solid ground.
If you’d only let go of my hand
So I can find a place,
A place to stand.
VERSE TWO
You’re the one thing I thought wouldn’t change;
But you changed.
Ah-oh
How could you just up and change on me?
And this re-alization
Figures the equation.
CHOROUS
If I could fly away from here
And find a place to stand;
I can think clearer on solid ground.
If you’d only let go of my hand
So I can find a place,
A place to stand.
BRIDGE
Like a question mark
At the end of a sentence
Where a period should be;
You’re making me
Rethink my statements,
Crossing to insanity.
1+1, I thought was 2.
But now I’ve learned it equals YOU.
Where’s the “me” in this?
I’ve got to know.
Your lack of selflessness
Is starting to show.
FINAL CHOROUS
I’ve finally flown away from there,
And found a place to stand.
I can think clearer on solid ground.
Pulled my hand right out of yours
And all I’ve got to say now is
At least my feet are on the ground,
At least they’re on the ground.
Author notes
OPTION TWO: title "At Least My Feet Are On The Ground"
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I loved how you made it into a song. That was a really neat twist on the title.
I loved it!!
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THIS WOULD MAKE A KILLER SONG!!! you really need to figure a way to do it...wow...it was really deep and well those lyrics totally rocked all the way...I agree that you were extremely clever in this...scary clever...sweet!
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I liked it, good luck in the contest
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Nice
You have got to make this into a song. Or someone you know has to.
Great lines. Strong feelings.
"1+1, I thought was 2.
But now I’ve learned it equals YOU."
LOL very, very clever!
As I read it for the ump-teenth time, I am trying to decide is this filled with energy and fast rhythm or is it slow and sad???
It is so good, it can go either way.
Good luck in the contest.
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WOW! This was really good. Even without a tune in my head, the flow just moved the piece from line to line so easily...and
'+1, I thought was 2.
But now I’ve learned it equals YOU.
Where’s the “me” in this?
I’ve got to know.
Your lack of selflessness
Is starting to show'
EXCELLENT...loved those words.
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That is really neat!! sorry, My mind's a little blurry right now, so I'm not going to be especially creative, but I did enjoy it.
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a beautiful song! great job, i think my favorite part is the bridge. you did a really great job on this one! =)
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whoa!!! that was fabulous!!! it reminds me of Stand by Rascal Flatts. this is wonderful!!!
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