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Safe Haven {Haiku Chain}

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Verdant undergrowth

Feathery fingers unfurl -

Cathedral towers

 

Shaded canopy

Filters luminescent beams -

Emphasize floor life

 

Plumed beauty hears

Indiscernible movement -

Head turn sideways glance

 

Iridescent forms

Invertebrate slithering -

Leaf mold safe haven

 

 

 

 

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  • Autumn Whisper
    September 7, 2008

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    Another beautiful haiku chain Sue, you should give yourself a pat on the back - it sounds, and looks, gorgeous. The only thing I wouldn't want to come across is the slithering invertebrate - I'm guessing that's a snake? *shivers*
    Great work once again though,
    Nice one
    best wishes as always
    Autumn Whisper


  • bethan-gaze
    September 7, 2007
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    This is so pretty ... lovely imagery and a lovely pic as well!


  • Swan song gold member
    May 14, 2007

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    I like the first two the most. Esp the first one how the feathery fingers unfurl, so or like the trees reaching sunward. Lots of imagry in all of them.
    cool

  • deleteit
    May 13, 2007

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    I got the image of an abandoned church or something. With stillness except for the slight movements of feathery friends and slithering snakes. I liked reading this. It carried an enchanting...serene feel to it


  • ScarletO gold member
    May 4, 2007

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    What can I say about this haiku scene? It is absolutely stunning and the photo matches perfectly the scene you have created with your breathtaking words. Well done.

  • InBetweenThoughts
    April 24, 2007

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    Good morning Sue Wow you seem to be really on a role! This is an excellent piece of your growing art form of Haiku poetry. The picture you have given us to see comes to life so magically before us. Wonderful choice of words, great form and flow from one to the next! Boy the competition is getting tough these days. Good luck with your beautiful entry in the contest. Ken IBT


  • Puppydog gold member
    April 23, 2007

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    VERY BEAUTIFUL!

    Oh what may lie on the forest floor! You have so beautifully described so many precious things one might see in the woods .


  • sheltered
    April 23, 2007
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    I have to agree with Luna, love tha second line alliteration. Awesome imagery thoughout.


  • Luna Tique Fringe
    April 23, 2007

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    Sue this as lush as the forest you write about..the first is my favorite..the alliteration is awesome..
    "feathery fingers unfurl" wow


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    April 22, 2007

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    Very very Beautiful

    This is a wonderful piece of writing, Sue. I know exactly what you mean when you refer the 'verdant undergrowth, feathery fingers unfurl,' to a cathedral. It does seem like that. The imagery is so very great in this. The language used is beautiful as well. Well done for this Sue, I loved it.

    Wayne
    xxxxx

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