I, take you now with my knife,
To halve and to scold,
From this night forward,
For it’s better,
In the hearse,
In my sickness
And in hell,
My love,
You will perish,
From this night forward,
Until death do us part.
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With this knife I thee bled,
And with it,
I bestow upon thee all the sicknesses of my mind, heart and hands.
I give you this cut as a symbol of our sin.
As I slice down your fingers, may they remind you always that you are surrounded by my enduring evil.
This pain I give you, in token and pledge of our constant war and abiding hate.
Author notes
The first is the vow, the second is the ring ceremony.
....In case that needed to be pointed out.
A contest entry
- PRE-WRITES GALLORE ~!~!~! by Naridill.
800 points, ended January 31, 2008, 138 entries
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I like it. Nice dark humor with a streak of the reality of marriage these days.
Please don't be offended when I ask you to sign a pre-nup though. -
What a beautiful, Adam's family type wedding. Was there a Maid of Horror and a Ring Terror? I liked it - original, funny/creepy. Stay away from my family.
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Well I found this absolutely hilarious as hell, and then some.
Also, quite creative.
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kick ass
i'm jealous that i didnt think of this -
It's funny but not exactly what I was looking for.....
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On your authors page you mention being a lost puppy, well I'd like to add sick puppy to that. But that's not necessarily a bad thing. It'll take a special fellow to say I do to you.
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Ahh such wonderful vows! Mine will be much the same! I love it in all its great bloodiness...
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Haha, that was great. I found it very funny, but then again I do have that sick sense of humor. I love how it mocks regular vows, I could definetely see the parody.
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wow ~ not what I expected. Dark but humourous. You have lifted this nicely with black comedy. Well done.
Thanks for entering,
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Clever wit
Hahaha - very good. I like your dark humour and the line about "halving and scolding" is very clever. I was going to ask you to marry me since I think you're a wonderful person but now I am "halving" second throats lol. Definitely need a second throat with you around in that mood.
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SUPERB
No way to escape, poor fellow! Don't kill him in one go, do it slowly so that he can savour it.
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wow...really cool. I like it,but at the same time pity whoever you married in this case(lol,i hope). anywho...kinda wacko but in a scary nice way. good write.
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all I ask is for an invitation to the wedding...this would be awesome. great job! made me laugh and kind of creeped me out, but it was still beautiful...which all sounds dorky...lol. again, great "smeg" (hehe, stole your word)
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I love it!
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