Spike heels and cheap perfume.
Barrio nun, she don’t give herself away.
Nice Catholic girl kneels humbly to pray.
Wants the men to notice her as she passes,
quickly into her pocket, go her ugly glasses.
Virgin in spike heels and cheap perfume,
letting wandering eyes look and assume.
Saving herself for the convent, wondering
if a novena in a chapel is all she will sing.
She likes the heat of hand run down hip,
bites saucily at a painted, pouting lip.
Will she save herself for what she holds dear,
or will spike heels mean a baby every year?
Barrio nun, too young to play the game,
bound for a baby without a father’s name.
Rosary of misery, each bead a pleading prayer
she will find a miracle to take her out of there.
Author notes
Diamonds might have been a girl's best friend at one time,
but now consider the condom the best pal you'll ever find.
In a list
A contest entry
- Phrases by piccola.
700 points, ended May 5, 2007, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Looking For Crickets by Celticmoon.
1500 points, ended July 15, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Thank you for reading my work!
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Sadly this is a perfect description of so many young girls now a days. It saddens me to see girls given in so easily. It is as if they hold no true self respect and thus allow themselves to be viewed and treated in such a manner. Yet, let one label the as society normally does and they are quick to lash out claiming they are not what they appear. But how can one not be such if that is how they act. Yes, judging on presumptions is wrong but in reality people do it everyday. Thank you for entering and good luck!
Blessings
Bel
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Wow, this piece had me hooked! Such a story line, such a moral, too! The sadness of this is that it's so true for so many people. The rhyme gave it good rythm and reading ease. Once again, congratulations on being hood-winked!
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Sure like the sentiments you h ave expressed so well in these lines - liked the flow, the rhythm and the rhyme as well. Remember taking music lessons from the nuns at the convent; the smell, the rigid routine - liked where you took this phrase and the great way you wrote it. Youhave been HOOD WINKED by The Poetic Bandits. Congratulations; this is your day. Have a good one!
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Children do grow up too fast these days, wanting to experience everything in life right away, not wanting to leave anything for the future.
I like this piece a lot. The flow is very good, as well as the rhyme, and the message is rather clear in this piece. And I like the fact you took a catholic nun for this piece to show the human nature better. All in all, this is a wonderful piece of work and definately worth the gold
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Thank you!!
What a joy and honor to win gold in this. I feel very strongly about the subject and was glad someone heard what I was trying to say. All the entries were great and I am thrilled.
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This is great and expresses so much. Young people get grown up wayyyyyyyy too soon. I don't think I knew anything about sex until I got married...now my grandkids know more that I do. It's a shame really. Thanks for this great entry.
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wow great poem and well written good luck
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You're on a roll at the moment--this is excellent work. Hard-edged and street-smart, but tinged with poignancy and vulnerability. Your depiction of a Catholic barrio girl aware of her burgeoning sexuality and the conflict between this and her Catholic upbringing is very convincing. And all in rhyming couplets too!
Bill
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