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King Of Shattered Hearts

His earthquake sends cracks, in the surface, unstable
Tried to shuffle a bridge, to cross the table
But every time I get somewhere
The King of Shattered Hearts is there
When I take a step forward, I always will see
That bright crimson suite, as he's coming towards me
He steals my time, burns the paper to black
He gave me no mercy, and stabbed one-eyed Jack
As he took my ace, my seven, and four
I knew from that point he was winning this war
I pleaded for my only wish.
I offered the world, and he said "go fish"
I kept my face straight, and then replied "fine"
But before I could draw, he had captured my nine
I know now that he's got me beat
But someday my bridge will be complete
Somehow I'm driven to get somewhere
I'll wait for that King to not be there
I will pray for bells to ring
And take his omnipotent sting
When he looks away, I'll flee the scene
Just to return to my beautiful Queen

Author notes

April 23, 2007... This is about how my father thinks it's wrong for me to be with my girlfriend... he says it's because we break rules, but I know that's just an excuse for him not wanting us toghether because we're gay. The cards represent the different parts of me and all my mixed emotions of rage towards him... but by doing everything he can to keep us apart, he's only feeding my motivation... This is about my determination to get past my father no matter what.

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  • sesshandkag
    January 8, 2008
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    this is fantastic.

  • kimba
    January 8, 2008
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    this is sad that parents cant execpt their childrens choices . but a great write well done


  • Fairy Nutty Buddy silver member
    October 15, 2007

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    Emotional, intense poem. Congrats on the gold in the current contest and all of the other trophies! I hope that one day your dad will be open-minded and there will be no trouble.


  • lesbian-in-love
    September 23, 2007

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    wow i must say that i love this one. i do know what it is like my father still cant accept it. he will say one thing but do the complete opposite. so i can relate with this poem. very well written. thanks for entering and good luck.


  • forget my memories
    August 5, 2007
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    This was a very good poem thank you for entering my contest!


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    June 29, 2007

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    Autumnsflame97,

    First off, Thank you very much for your entry in my contest =]

    Second, I love this write; I absolutely love the passion in your words as you release the emotions that are holding you down and you end it with love for your Queen Stunning. I am sorry that you Father seems to think it is wrong, that is a subject that upsets me personally because homophobia is wrong and people need to learn love doesn't come in straight packages

    Excellent !
    Best of luck =]
    Stay safe
    ~Amanda


  • Ignis Corpus
    June 28, 2007

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    wow i loved this one. im glad you entered it i enjoyed reading it, and i wish you the best of luck in the contest, i can realate to this poem very much

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    June 7, 2007
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    Wow this is an amazing write I really like this. My favorite line is this:
    But someday my bridge will be complete
    Dont give up on what you want. Im sorry for all your suffering. Thank you for sharing your poem and adding it to the contest. Best of luck to you


  • x Bright Eyes x
    May 21, 2007

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    hi i thought this was very good it gave the reader an image and you portrayed it well thank you for entering and wish you the best of luck in my contest


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    May 2, 2007

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    I'm sorry you are left feeling this way. Sometimes it's difficult for parents especially fathers with daughters to accept their partners and choice of them but they have to learn that sometimes we have to take our own path and you aren't really doing anything wrong. I think society is ignorant of difference. I'm visually impaired and many people treat me differently, so I know how it feels to be stared at. But don't worry if you love her let that be all that matters and those you care about should give you the respect you give them.

  • piccola silver member
    April 23, 2007

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    I think this shows me that I need to maybe give them some room; some support, or I'll make things worse...I hope your dad reads this. Thanks for the entry. I feel a little light seeping through the tunnel.


  • animated lies
    April 22, 2007

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    I really enjoyed your use of words more than your rhyme scheme. The flow was slightly off, but I was humbled by the metaphors and simple words. I absolutely love how you used the title and the play of "cards."

    As he took my ace, my seven, and four
    I knew from that point he was winning this war
    I pleaded for my only wish.
    I offered the world, and he said "go fish"


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    April 22, 2007

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    Interesting write you have here.
    It can be very difficult when people in your life
    won't give you a chance and don't accept you for
    the person that you are deep down inside. Especially when they're your parents. I am sorry that you are going through such a rough time in your relationship.
    I do hope that things do turn around for you and that
    you will be able to live your life with that special someone that you love.

    I love the way you incorporated the cards in this poem. The imagery and emotions here are great!
    Thank you for your entry in my contest!
    I appreciate it and wish you the best of luck
    with it!



    Jeremy0826

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