stuck between the bulletproof
layers of lasagne sheets and city streets,
she is suspended --
doubt in one hand like a left-over meal,
& regret in the other;
newspaper cutouts dancing, arms folded,
lips determinedly flat as water.
beyond cupboard & key -
candle wax memories are tied with string,
but the sepia drips through brown paper.
like sanguinary art,
nothing holds the tide.
the warnings are vapid,
the solutions thwarted,
and bitumen faces are blank CDs
telling her world not to worry-
“ - life wasn’t meant to be easy - ”
there’s a tie ‘round that neck,
& a speck of insecurity, dark
on a white collar,
heaven’s one footstep away,
but she’s too real, with drum beats for blood,
language in her lungs,
& embers for eyes,
it’s her own eternal gap;
perfection’s a photograph,
the dimensions too thin
to slide between --
A contest entry
- Best of the Best by Sapphire Rose.
600 points, ended May 21, 2007, 50 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - no options- no way out: APRIL by duke of balabamas.
1560 points, ended May 16, 2007, 64 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical comments are most welcome.
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I happen to sleep under these "lasagne sheets" you mentioned. They're quite comfy and warm too.
Definately kept me in suspension with this person you've mentioned. Suicide... a terrible thing these days. And to do it by a hanging? Dreadful. All the more reason to like it. Wonderfully done.
Sweetest of dreams! ~D -
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Thanks honey.. have fun with your contest
xxx
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Such a diverse bouquet of imagery and thought combined. Very well articulated, with such a wonderful sense of imagery and metaphor...
My favorite lines here:
"beyond cupboard & key -
candle wax memories are tied with string,
but the sepia drips through brown paper.
like sanguinary art,
nothing holds the tide"
Excellent piece of poetry!
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The beginning of this poem just pangs you with emotion which is kept throughout the whole art.. great job... especially adore the phrase of perfection being a photograph.. smart.
~Ryan~
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very good, interesting the diffrence in poems. hehe well done
keep it up
emeraldsoldier
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