Look into those eyes.
The ones who lie so well.
To tell the truth would
Be such a crime for her.
She holds onto her fantasies
Silver moonbeams and cobwebs
Thoughts of Forever
Or Maybe Sometimes Never.
She's incapable of truth.
Her hands reach into your chest
Rip your heart out and
Feed to it a pack of wolves
You can see everything
Every Lie, Every Untruth
For sometimes those are
Two Very different things.
Watch her closely.
There's an anger there.
Something she's going to
Take out on you too.
So when you feel you are
Getting her everything.
Realize you're always going
To Be second Best.
Please tell me what you think
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This was very good. It made me think. I often feel the same way. The poem was a little comfusing however, like I know it is about a relationship, but you should describe the relationship more to help the readers visualize it better.
Anyway, great job conveying your emotions through this poem.
God bless,
Bright Smyles
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I like what you had to say. Although I must admit, the center alignment does take the piece off-kilter and leaves some of the verses hanging by theirselves in a disconnect circuit.
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Wow so true. No one likes to be second best. but i've gotten used to it. Awesome poem!
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nice...very visual
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Excellent. I get the sentiment of this completely, with what I am going through at the moment.
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wow
i feel as though you got into my own head
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this sounds like a relationship gone bad to me. it sounds like a wonderful guy who was treated wrong by the woman that he loved to me. but i could be wrong-pixie
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i gotta ask what it's about???? this sounds like it could be a relationship, a friendship, a simple rivalry, or even a sibling thing. either way, i thought it was good if you are really trying to convey the idea of "second best", though, you might want to include more about how you feel when you are made second to this person. for example, when you say "she holds on to her fantazies", maybe say something about how she ruins your dream of finally beating her at something. idk, just an idea good write! keep going
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ouch this struck a nerve. this is how i feel in my relationship problems. im always second best w/ her. and wats worse is im second best to my best friend. but this is a very good write. keep it up.
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