I climb onto my horse
a Roan Stallion, fifteen hands
his spirit rises as I do.
He is off in a canter
and around the barn door onto
the bridal path a loping gallop.
I sit my saddle well and move with him
leaning into a turn, then back
bending over his lurching neck to jump a fallen tree.
My black hat brim bends away from my eyes
I avoid a low branch. Smiling now,
man and horse in rhythm.
I can Breathe.
I am leaving
and I am not sad
Leaving in anger
brings regrets.
So I leave and keep my anger
in the soft sleep, curled in the corner
like a lazy cat on the window seat.
I need to Breathe.
And there she lay
on the bed near the window
and the window was near the hearth.
The undulating firelight
brought the curve of her hip to me.
I stood for a second
just to hold the perfect vision
for soon I would be near her
then closer still and entwined with her;
so new, I breathe her in...
Author notes
Options #1 and #2-losing and finding...sorry
A contest entry
- Lost Love, Found Love Show me Both!! by Ravenic Seraphim.
649 points, ended April 29, 2007, 21 entries
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Wonderful words
in this very vivid free verse, just made me wish for my farm again. I had the best time riding horses. This just gave me so many memories...I love how you balanced the freedom he felt, and how it tied in with the love and passion for the lady...The picture was awesome...words of an artist..excellent writing!..novy
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Thanks for entering it.
ITs a very lovely poem I like it
Its very Vivid, Great job on it.....
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very nice. very vivid. good job with writing this. enjoyed the read. good luck in the contest.
blu
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Here's what horsepower can do for you. Some dreams are just too temptingly beautiful to not try to capture in poetical moods. Thank you for creating and sharing. Good luck in the contest. Take care,
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Thank You U-
there is nothing like this feeling for me, it puts me in a poetic mood...wonderful to hear from you, my friend...PK
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This speaks volumes of the solitary desires of man and his deeper need to be loved unconditionally...
Very prolific works, sweet poet...
Bravo!
Marianne
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Thank you Marianne
for your wonderful words and insights... unconditional yes, maybe you are right about that...PK
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beautifully done
Once again, a pleasure to read your words...
"So I leave and keep my anger
in the soft sleep, curled in the corner
like a lazy cat on the window seat.
I need to Breathe."
Beautiful!
Lynda
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Thank you Lynda
for your kind words and wonderful comments... like a lazy cat...wonder if we could do that in real life?...PK -
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LOL perhaps...I am afraid if I did, then one day the seat would get too full and the cat would turn into a tiger and someone could get hurt hehe
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'and the window was near the hearth.
The undulating firelight
brought the curve of her hip to me.
I stood for a second'
Just for a second a vision, I could breathe! Creative lines, touch of soft spoken tenderness. ~Sie
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Thanks Sie
for your wonderful words and comments, it is always wonderful to hear from you...PK
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Sighhh...Ahhh...This is so beautifully penned...I love to ride...Horses are such lovely, intelligent creatures...But don't go, Poet Man...
and there he stood
in the whispering moonlight,
watching me, wanting to recline
into dreams beside me ~
me wanting him
to move in determined silence
to my trembling side.
Sinuous ripples in his forearms danced
as he reached for me,
eyes luminous with flames
we would both be warmed by...
I breathe him in...
See whatcha went & made me do??? 
Good luck in the contest, my Friend...
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Thank you Wanda
for the kind words and comments and the lovely reply, just amazing...PK
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And horse and man are free to ride, free to love and find love again. The freedom and joy in this speaks volumes for how the man will search but yet is never tied to emotions who will drag him down. It flows beautifully and it makes me yearn to ride once more, alone in the mountains. Love, C
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Thank you Chez
amazing, my fantasy and real preference is to ride alone, go figure... thanks for reading and your wonderful words...PK
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