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My First Blind Date

He said he'd have on purple
And so I was led to believe
He didn't tell me it'd be hidden
Up under his suit coat sleeve

He'd told me about his smile
That I'd be willing to walk a mile
I took this to be true
But his smile was a please "undo"

So far this is not to my liking
I'm feeling like maybe hiking
A sprint or two from here
Cause he's a dud, I fear

He noticed the red rose
That I had promised to wear
And when he finally sat down
That's all he did was stare

You'd think he'd never saw a rose before
I thought for a moment, that I should get one more
Perhaps he'd like to wear one on his lapel
The awful way he's staring at it, I just can't tell

I interrupt his glance by reaching for his hand
I softly stroked, and suddenly he ran for the band
I couldn't imagine what he was ordering for me to hear
I got kind of nervous so I gobbled down my whole beer

If I was about to do a jig with him I wanted to be ready
I just knew I'd need a double shot to help me to keep steady
Cause he was just not the suave gentleman that I was looking for
I was not at all happy with the things I had coming in store

My feet were sore and bruised from where he'd stepped on them
He danced as if he was from another planet or another realm
Of course if that was all he'd done, I'd be most satisfied
But I discovered down the road that he had also lied

I'd paid a guy to interrupt if things were not so Kosher
So making my way to the ladies' room I whispered that I was ready
I could bear not another moment with the likes of this guy Freddy
So my actor friend, as quickly as he could, got me into his caddy

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  • th3sl4y3r
    May 13, 2007

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    This is very funny, and actually quite scarry too
    athe flow and rhythm is good through the poem, a few awkward places here and there, but the hmour fixed that up quite nicely... some of the rhymes seem a bit forced and don't quite sound right towards the end... but other than that a very enjoyable read, well done!!
    thank you for entering my contest and good luck...
    peace and light always.


    • 2lullabyhaven
      May 14, 2007
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      Thank you, I am in an experimental mode, so I am trying out some of these very interesting
      contests, I love your response to this one I attempted.


  • A Leper Messiah
    April 22, 2007
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    lol. Very funny write. Blind dates very rarely go right.


    • 2lullabyhaven
      April 22, 2007
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      True...

      Thank you, I hope that means that you think it to be funny...lol


  • Pete Greenslade gold member
    April 21, 2007

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    i love it

    so vivid a memory ..wish i was your chaperone that night .your emory of this sacred occasion really amused mem

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