Sometimes I think it's best
to hide myself away.
To let the world go by,
and not get in the way.
Sometimes I feel so sad,
no reason I just do.
I think I'm better off,
when I'm hidden from view.
I try to stay upbeat,
but times I know I fail.
Then I feel discouraged,
weak and often frail.
This world gets me so down,
and takes my will to fight.
I struggle to survive,
to make it through the night.
With darkness as my mask,
in shadows I do hide.
The agony and pain,
I hold down deep inside.
Curled into a ball,
I lay upon my bed.
Moisture on my pillow,
from all the tears I've shed.
Author notes
Based off this quote: Darkness be my mask
and hide me within the shadows
A contest entry
- Quotes - dark and depressing by BittersweetPhantasm.
600 points, ended May 3, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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this is very heartfelt, and i can definately relate to it. i especially like the last two stanzas.
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Very emotional, a poem that touches the heart as I can really relate to this. Good luck in the contest.
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Hey more over think you got a whole company of people who will relate to this write. Very powerful fueled with honesty got that good bad girl touch hun know how you feel when you reach that hide away feeling *rose8 very nicely penned
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wow - this is very sad, and quite relatable.
i love the last two stanzas:
With darkness as my mask,
in shadows I do hide.
The agony and pain,
I hold down deep inside.
Curled into a ball,
I lay upon my bed.
Moisture on my pillow,
from all the tears I've shed.
well done and good luck -
Jeannie this is butiful ..i often feel like this poem ..oh i know im loved n all that stuff ..but sometimes my heart is sad for a reason i cant find mayb it it is sad coz of the way life is for the whole world and its feelin sad for everyone not just me .. sorry i cant explain that to well ..but your poem says it all ...well done and good luck in the contest xxx cheeky xxx
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excellent!
Your words paint the sad picture of this person's existence. I think a lot of us try to be upbeat, but this world is such a mess. You did a great job writing about the quote you based this on.
I especially like this stanza:
"With darkness as my mask,
in shadows I do hide.
The agony and pain,
I hold down deep inside."
Best wishes in the contest!
Ethereal Melody
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Awesome Job
Wonderful Job Jeannie, you have done an awesome job on extending the quote. Great depth of thoughts and we all have a mask to some degree. There is alot of sadness in the world but there is also beauty. -
Ahh, my friend, I now this is for the contest, and yet somehow I see a piece of your own heart in here. But you know you are loved, at least on here! Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e *
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