In the silence of my dreams
I hear the low growl
I know that it has entered
My body turning cold
Trying to awake
Tossing and turning to rid my head
of images before me
Your odor invading my senses
the stench sickening
Hearing your breathing
getting progressively faster
The heat of your breath making
my room hot and damp
Your eyes black as the night
mouth drooling a foul substance
My body tightens up from fear
I am unable to move out of your path
Getting closer and closer to me
as I struggle to breath
Your mouth opens wide
teeth like knives coming at me
I scream with all that I have
Waking myself up, shaking,
in a pool of sweat
The beast is gone.......
but will it return?
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A contest entry
- Thoughts by My Obsession.
315 points, ended May 16, 2007, 6 entries
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The beast
As a sufferer of nightmares I can really appreciate this fine dark write. The night terrors. sadly i know them well. Perhaps that accounts for my insomnia. But just the same I did enjoy this piece so much..
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SO VIVID DESCRIPTIONS!
Our nightmares do indeed bring our the worst in us and our dreams.
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good write...im glad i didn't read it when i was five though!
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Yikes...sounds like a bad one night stand...where you wake up the next morning and want to chew your arm off! This was dark and good! I have never had night terrors, but I have certainly heard alot about them and pray I never get them! Good strong write with some excellent imagery!
~Tia
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Wow!
You really brought this nightmarish poem to life, I don't know whether to go back to sleep or sleep with a night light...
And congrat on your challenge.
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Very well done. this is very nightmarish. I like it a lot. I could tell whihc image it was from before I clicked on the link. Good luck in the contest!
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bad dream
I think I would stay awake and sleep another time. Glad you made it out alive.
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good job
very intense and dark. love it!! -
Very intense write. I love it.
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OH Wake up! Jeezzz, this is dark, chilling and can make me shake , gripping the things that cause us night terrors...Excellent, and different side of you emerging....
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