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Cuckold

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Adoration, smites with

fury, least the meek inherits
all;
To short the time of wooing,
where the eyes fall shy once
more;
In searching for a lover, gather
rose buds whilst you may, to be sure
the time is right love, lay you not
upon the hay;
So if all is true and worthy...
and a partner by your side, respect
your beating heart sir, and let it
be your guide;
If you heed not what it tells
you, then your own mistakes
are made, well kind sir you
should have seen it, as you really
have been ....played.

 

 

 

 

Author notes

'O love is the crooked thing,
There is nobody wise enough
To find out all that is in it,
For he would be thinking of love
Till the stars had run away'...Yeats

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  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    June 25, 2007

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    Very beautiful and heartfelt... Thanks for sharing this with me. I can feel the metaphors and words that were written almost as if they were penned by the heart itself. Love always and best wishes to you! Keep writing and feeling, delving into your heart! x


  • Vagabond
    June 18, 2007
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    Great job on this! I can't say why, but it rather reminded my of the closing scene in "The Merchant Of Venice" (Its a compliment, that is my favorite play." Really good job anyways, your use of phrasing and word play was well done and much appreciated. Really great work anyways, i enjoyed it alot!


    • cutiepie gold member
      June 19, 2007
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      I also have a love for Shakespearian plays....thank you for your comments, as always, very much appreciated


  • pickers silver member
    June 15, 2007

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    Great write. Isn't 'cuckold' one of the most wonderful words in the English language? I love the part "If you heed not what it tells/ you, then your own mistakes/ are made." Fantastic work!


  • kkatie55
    June 11, 2007

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    wow very good

    this is a suprise ending lovely I like...it is old style wording which I personally enjoy all in all... what can I say...keep up the good writing ...good luck with all your writing...Peace katie


  • Naridill
    April 24, 2007

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    Yeats, whoop! I just help a yeats contest and brillant entries as is this. I feel anything that reflects his work is definately headed in right direction. And you did in wonderfully.
    Well done!!


  • grannyeri gold member
    April 23, 2007

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    What wonderful olden quotes used here in these lines - fit so good together in this poem. Cenrtainly go well with the picture too. liked the flow, rhythm and rhyme - enjoyed the read,

    • cutiepie gold member
      April 23, 2007
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      Many thanks for you kind comments as always, very much appreciated


  • Love of a Bullet
    April 22, 2007

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    Love the mix of the metaphysical and contemporary in this piece. The cliches are actaully well suited and leave the reader feeling as if modern observational pieces on love are quite dead yet. This should make for a better than fair contest entry, best wishes.

    Good luck in your future works.

    ~Das

    PS - Check out the Raven contest (20,000 points and cash) coming to Allpoetry this June.

    • cutiepie gold member
      April 22, 2007
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      Many thanks for your comments, as always, very much appreciated

  • pruedence
    April 22, 2007

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    Good poem, one that most can relate too..good thoughts from the quote given..well done, thanks for sharing


  • El Pescador silver member
    April 21, 2007

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    This has the mark of the great poets, a language of eloquence and a romance rarely seen. You write so well. This is trully great piece of writing. Thank you.


  • Touchof1der silver member
    April 21, 2007

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    This is absolutely breathtaking, and the emotional infusion within the lines is undeniable. You have done an admirable job of bringing out so much meaning with the words you have carefully chosen here. Keep that pen handy and let the ink continue to flow because your words are always worth reading! Good luck in the contest
    ♥ Touchof1der


  • Cannonsfire
    April 21, 2007
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    Thank you for your most intriguing and beautiful entry

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