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Empty vase (Haiku)

glistening glass vase
reflections, mirror my thoughts
of pure emptiness

A contest entry

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  • sheltered
    April 22, 2007
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    Nice alliteration rythm and metaphor. Seems you've been on a roll. great stuff.


  • Inside and out
    April 21, 2007

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    A very intense poem. Beautiful on the surface but empty...wonderful comparisson to the vase. Well done my friend. I really like this!


  • Whoochi gold member
    April 21, 2007

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    OHHHHHHHHHHH, Brosef, I adore this and is exactly the way I feel right now, emptiness...yet my thoughts turned to how much you could add to this....love love love short writes....and this is awesome in form, structure and so metaphorically on target, THIS better win something or I am going to have to kick up a fuss.....


  • Harrisham Minhas
    April 21, 2007

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    Very beautiful and emotional Haiku.

    Thanks for your entry. Good luck in my contest

    Harrisham Minhas