A shadow in the doorway, a footstep on the stair
A whisper in the evening to let you know I'm there
I've returned now to see you, for it was meant to be
The day I left my body, so my soul could fly free
I need your understanding, it really was my choice
Instead of tears and anger, please smile and then rejoice
For I have light around me and arms to hold me tight
For it is always day-time, no demons in the night
So feel my presence near you, I'll sing for you today,
Within the breeze of freedom, I've at last found my way
I'm gone from earthly body, but what I say is true
Each cloud has silver linings, within my sky of blue
Author notes
My thoughts are with you all, Ros
A contest entry
- He Took his Own Life! Please... comfort poems needed... by Periwinkle Blue.
475 points, ended May 1, 2007, 20 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Comforting
Very sweet and a poem that is really lovely
and helpful to the family I would think.
Dixie
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those last two lines gave me chills. beautifully crafted poem in a bittersweet and melancholic way.
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Exquisitely filled with love and compassion
I could hear my cousins voice behind these poetic verses. TY so much for such comforting words. I cannot tell you how hard it is believe my cousin is gone. Thanks for your kindness and compassion. Patti -
OH, my goodness... a masterpiece!
The rhyming in this poem is magnificent! 
What a fine message, so uplifting and loving! 
I know that anyone experiencing such a loss will be comforted by this wonderful poem! Thank you! 
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A lovely comforting piece.
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"A shadow in the doorway, a footstep on the stair
A whisper in the evening to let you know I'm there
I've returned now to see you, for it was meant to be
The day I left my body, so my soul could fly free"
I liked the first stanza very much. you've done such a nice job!
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This is a comforting.................
peice you have written and sure it brings comfort to the hurting family and firend of this soul who took his own life. Your words are superb in painting a mental picture of him foating around all of his loved ones trying to assure them he is in a better place. I hope your days get easier to go through one by one. It will taek time and just know it was he and not anyone else who made that decision as he wouldn't want anyone feeling guilty for what he did. He makes that clear as well in this piece. Very well written!!!!!Thanks for sharing!!!!
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Gret rhtyhm adn rhyme, flow in these lines. Such a soothng, peaceful poem that gives one a completely different take on this subject - nothing about the angst, the anger, or confusion of the person before the act itself. Think you really wrote a great comforting poem here - just what the contest challenge asked for.
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This is very uplifting,
and full os a spirit that has been set free,
very comforting within it's words and sure to bring comfort to the one needint it,
Thanks for sharing,
Warm thoughts
Frozentearz -
What a beautiful tribute to someone who was very special to you. BHolzner
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A shadow in the doorway, a footstep on the stair
A whisper in the evening to let you know I'm there
I've returned now to see you, for it was meant to be
The day I left my body, so my soul could fly free
I really like your intro to this write. It made me feel so sad at first. I like how you turned it around to be postive. I am sorry for the sorrow to the family, I feel you have done a very good job with this write -
Interesting. Some beautiful lines. A different way to look at such a situation.
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Beautiful...
Giving a voice to those who cannot speak out is always so emotionally charged...
You did a wonderful job...
I have chills because not too long ago a young man from our church killed himself...asphyxiation by fumes in the garage. He apparently changed his mind...and tried going in the house to call an ambulance... but it was too late. He died on the floor with the telephone in his hand.
So...
this brought HIS voice to me.
Great write.
xoxo
Heidi
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Pretty good
The rhyming was simple but effective. My faveorite part was:
I need your understanding, it really was my choice
Instead of tears and anger, please smile and then rejoice
For I have light around me and arms to hold me tight
For it is always day-time, no demons in the night
The rhyming in that stanza was great. Good job and best of luck in yyour writing future.
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I'm not to keen of straight-forward rhyming, but I did enjoy the message.
Well done!
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