It must hurt when things like this happen,
but it'll me okay in the end.
I know these words seem not to help,
for he was family,and a friend.
I know it'll be okay,
because I know your pain.
When death comes and hurts you,
it seems like you got caught in its rain.
Please don't blame yourselves,
or anyone else for that matter.
He would wnat you to be okay,
not to leave your soul in a scatter.
Please wipe your tears and remember him,
for the person you knew he was.
He would smile easier if he saw you smile too,
for remembering him as family,a friend and a cuz.
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Geekfreak
A contest entry
- He Took his Own Life! Please... comfort poems needed... by Periwinkle Blue.
475 points, ended May 1, 2007, 20 entries
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very comforting. TY so much.
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this is really good, beautiful
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Wow!!!
I should have read stuff like this before I tried to commit suicide and I never would have tried it!!! Umm... let's see I think in the second line me should be-be! in the fourth and last line there should be a space between the coma and-and! and you mispelled want six lines up! Also the rain in eighth line should be rein! Other than that it was teriffic keep them coming!!! -
Oh, how true and beautiful this poem is!
This really does make ME feel better and I am sure the family of the young man who has left them so suddenly will love your poem! 
Thank you so much for sharing this fine message! 
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2nd line "me" should be "be"
11th line "wnat" should be "want"
These lines are strong:
"Please don't blame yourselves,
or anyone else for that matter.
He would wnat you to be okay,
not to leave your soul in a scatter."
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