My first kiss with you
was something sorta special
tried to kiss me on the deck
as I gazed upon the stars
Baby dont rush
you moving to quick
Hours went by
while watching a movie
you wanted a kiss
but got a peck instead
Still that wasnt the end
A real kiss
is what you wanted to get
As you took me home that night
We sat in your car and kissed
BIg juicy lips
That wasnt good enough for me
I had you kiss me
the way I like to be kiss
Slow passionate long
neva ina rush
Fast learned
my first kiss
had me breathless
because I cant breath out my nose
Long passionate kiss
Big juicy lips
what a kiss
Ill never forget
Our first kiss
A contest entry
- Summer by HannahBrookeXD.
470 points, ended May 14, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - biggest contest in allpoetry history! (i hope) need 1,000 entries!! by Gasp.
1300 points, ended July 11, 2007, 638 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Ah yes, first kisses. This is such a wonderful poem, regardless of a few grammatical mistakes. Good job! -hannah
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I am guessing that your first kiss was in the summer? Well, if it was I can totally relate to that! I think this all together is a wonderful poem that is just so passionate and sweet, full of emotion from both sides of the line. I think that if you made a couple of spaces, it'd look even better....to me, it's easier on the eyes if you do so. Hmmm, maybe I'm just picky. Keep it however you'd like. Either way it totally rocks! Oh my goodness, you did wonderful! I loved it so much...Nice write you have and I hope you do awesome in the contest.
~Poetrydove~
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