Straight Black but for red streaks
Always out of sight still on mind
Wondering if anyone suspects
Knowing they couldn't possibly know
Everything I hear is depressing
No reason to live
Everyone looks at you like a freak
Just because of the ways to deal
Pain is nothing, just a helper
To get you closer to death
Every cut is just the warm up
For the one to end it all
A contest entry
- DARK, need I explain more? by crystallynnbradford.
300 points, ended April 27, 2007, 18 entries
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Comments
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This is a nice dark poem, but it doesn't express anger so much as resignation. An enjoyable write, however.
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Mmmm, i liked the meaning of this poem alot. thanks for entering..
Claire-Anne
"Pain is nothing, just a helper
To get you closer to death
Every cut is just the warm up
For the one to end it all" -
Ooooh me likey me likey me likey! I'm digging the ending, definitly the best part of it all. Very well done, thank yees muchly!!
Bandaid -
This is very Dark I love it. My favorite lines are these "Everything I hear is depressing
No reason to live"
"Pain is nothing, just a helper
To get you closer to death"
Nicely written Goodluck
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very dark, full of despair. My bother cut as a way of dealing with bullying, it hurt, it hurt to think that he felt he couldn't turn to me for help, but i understand that it's mean to help, i've never had it in me to attempt it, i have wanted to in the past though. But to be honest i'm glad that i didn't i dealt with it a different way. I never judge but am not narrowminded enough to think that people who do are freaks, i see them as people with issues that they need help to deal with, the last stanza is very powerful, so dark, giving up all hope, just waiting to die, wow it's so brave to write it down, i'm lost for words to say! Trapped, by your own thoughts, trapped and feeling there is no other way out. Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest babi xxx
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I like this! The last stanza is definitely the best part of this poem. I love these lines.
Pain is nothing, just a helper
To get you closer to death
Every cut is just the warm up
For the one to end it all
Just plain beautiful! Good luck in the contest! -
well done
I really enjoyed reading this piece and I love the last sentece. It's not as dark as I had hoped but I think your title compensates for that. This is a really good piece and I enjoyed reading it very much. Thanks for entering.
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this is very true i felt the same way when i cut myself i dont anymore and i hope you dont either you are a great poet thanks for sharing and keep that pen flowing god bless you forever and always sign dianna lee green
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Great
i liked it. it was kind of sad but good
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