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Dividing light

Weeping on murky shoulders;
curled like a lock flowing softly,
wiping away spoiled words of wisdom.

Auditory language giggles,
as I sob in self pity
for my trampled existence.

And all the while hoping for reasons
to twist into shapes of familiarity
or proverbial dreams.

An acceptance of so many wrongs,
like sour vinegar waiting for a recipe
lay just outside my mind, untouchable.

Yet still on my mission,
I endure and drift among tempest clouds
dividing the light from darkness.









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  • This has lovely imagery.
    'An acceptance of so many wrongs,
    like sour vinegar waiting for a recipe'
    This line is so vibrant! Sour vinegar, so pungent like bile welling up inside.
    I also love:
    'I sob in self pity
    for my trampled existence'
    Sometimes we trample our own existence, sometimes it's others that do it but either way the pain is deep.
    Wonderful!
    (How come I liked all your featured poems? Don't you have any duff ones at all?)

  • DannyBaby
    May 24, 2007
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    wow i like this peom alot
    your a great writer

  • Huntress silver member
    May 15, 2007

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    I feel like my soul is trampled some times Excellent poem


  • Shadows-stars
    May 6, 2007

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    I love the opening of this poem, it has great imagery and fantastic wording.. such deep sorrow.. I just love these lines...
    "And all the while I hope for reasons
    to twist into a shape of familiarity
    or proverbial dreams.
    An acceptance of so many wrongs "
    this is very beautiful... The ending is great, I love poems that end well and this certainly does.. well done..
    thank you for entering my contest and good luck
    peace and light always

  • Laura
    May 5, 2007
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    ohhh this is beautiful i love it well done xxxx

  • jimmyspoisongirl
    April 21, 2007
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    sorry, i spelled excited wrong, lol

  • jimmyspoisongirl
    April 21, 2007

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    WOOOWWW!!!

    this is really good! i love it, and your use of words is amazing! its very good! thanx for commenting on my poem! ur the first one so i was EXITED!!! =) thanks again, and like i said, i really love ur poem!


  • BittersweetPhantasm
    April 21, 2007

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    i like the imagery in this. you really didn't usee the expected theme of good versus evil until the last line... which i like. thank you.
    well done and good luck

  • Twins 4 me
    April 20, 2007
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    Great write and imagery! This is good!
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