keep trying
everyone complains from their emotions
even i know how it feels when a heart gets broken.
most of all people cry from their sadness
but (wake up( come on its a new morning.
keep trying because life goes on
on day in your life the birds will be chirping.
so come on get on your feet
keep trying until you deafeat.
one thing i did to make me feel better
i wrote this not good poem.
so go out and have some fun
becuse i am telling you life goes on!
A contest entry
- The Best From The Best Contest by JeannieD Hunter.
2200 points, ended April 21, 2007, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Show me watcha Got!! by agalford7053.
600 points, ended June 1, 2007, 35 entries
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"on day in your life the birds will be chirping." Was that supposed to be "one"?
I couldn't really tell whether it was supposed to be sad or funny...
Ashley -
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I like the overall message in this poem. That even though life seems rough sometimes, that its good to keep smiling, to keep going. Your poem seems a little plain though and I am unable to tell which number you submitted this for. It doesn't really make me laugh or cry, though its got a great central idea/message.
Thank you for entering the contest...
keep up the good work
~Ashley~ -
Great message for all of us! There is definitely beauty in simplicity. Just a suggestion, use spell check. Other than that, this is wonderful!! Thanks and good luck!
Jeannie
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