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Thanks a lot

I don't care
I don't care
I don't want to care
about this

I wish
I wish
I really wish
I had some peace

You don't know
You don't know
You don't want to know
what I'm feeling

My mind
My mind
My broken mind
hates you

Now you know
Now you know
Now you have to know
what you've done

All the things you said
All the sweet things you said
have left me for dead
waking up is something I dread
so thanks a lot

My heart
My heart
Oh, my aching heart
isn't bitter, just in pain

My theories
My theories
My pointless theories
have been poisoned by you

I think
I think
I can't think anymore
because it's all about you

We will never happen
We will never happen
We can't ever happen
Because you've lost my trust

Why am I not yours?
Why am I not yours?
Why can't I be yours?
Why do I still want you?

All the things you said
All the sweet things you said
waking up is what I dread
so thanks a lot
Now I'm dead

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  • Eternally Fallen
    August 2, 2007

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    Very Good, Seriously

    I really liked this peace. I agree with the other reply that it does seem sad. And I like the way you repeated yourself in stanzas, it helps to reinforce what you're saying! Good write.

  • luvdrkchocolate
    June 10, 2007
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    Oh. This is some poem that you have here. It seems so very sad and distressed like you're really struggling with your feelings right now and you don't know what to do. It must be very hard for you to see life in a positive light. I hope that after you wrote this you felt a little better.