In amongst harshest words,
You've told me how it's true that
I could never understand.
I can't feel like you do,
I don't feel your pain,
And things that hurt you
Could never affect me the same.
So take yourself back
And remember it all.
Recall every moment
You spent on the floor,
Crying for all they put you through,
And lead me through it,
So I might equal you.
For everytime she spoke harsh words,
Speak them to me.
Bring up my worst imperfections,
Deepest faults,
And parade them so I might see.
How she hurt you
You must hurt me.
For everytime she caused you pain,
Raise your hand to me again.
The quick sharpness stings my cheek,
As I stay,
Like you,
Forever meek.
And for everything she drove you to,
Plunge in the blade,
And drive me too.
Let me bleed on the floor,
Like you have done,
So many years before,
Then come and rescue me from this pain I've been through.
I went through hell so I might only be closer to you.
Now tell me you love me,
And all can be well.
And it's over for you.
Moment gone,
End of spell.
Now we are one,
But I'm still bleeding,
And I realise I've been here before.
All that you've put me through
I've felt so much more.
I went through this pain to feel your heartache,
Only to realise
I hurt more.
Yours is not the only heart that can break.
Author notes
You want to hear me screaming,
As the pain, it runs me through
And at last when I'm dying you pull me close
And whisper "I love you."
I wanted this to be so much more, but I ****ed it up. I don't think much of it, so I may be back to work on it. Alternatively, I may turn my back on it forever and disown it. We'll see.
A contest entry
- Quotes - dark and depressing by BittersweetPhantasm.
600 points, ended May 3, 2007, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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You did NOT fuck this up. I love it. I read it a couple times. Its really good and emotional. Don't disown it. Its really good. You're Great.
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... wow. this is an awesome poem - you didn't fuck it up.
i love the emotion running through it, completely charged. the last few lines are brilliance:
Now we are one,
But I'm still bleeding,
And I realise I've been here before.
All that you've put me through
I've felt so much more.
I went through this pain to feel your heartache,
Only to realise
I hurt more.
Yours is not the only heart that can break.
well done and good luck
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