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Still, there's a Tear

I never did get over you,
though I know I did move on.
Another tunnel I didn't pass though,
though the sign said "move along".
And so, in my life you remain,
a tear upon my lash.
I wait, and wait, yet still in vain,
for that one tear to fall and crash.
With me, as my battered heart had done,
and shattered on the floor.
I fought a battle and lost, not won,
for you, who I once adored.
And so you remain, still, a tear,
unfallen and still in my eye.
I tell my heart I don't want you here,
and let me, for my own sake, cry.

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  • thedarkestjolly
    May 6, 2008
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    ****

    It was like I could feel it this is a finalist without a doubt


  • ZestyDreams
    April 21, 2007

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    You've definately captured a feeling so well. I can relate to this poem so well. "I never did get over you, though I know I did move on."
    Life keeps going, but you are still never be able to fully get over a lost love. I know this, because even after six months Im experiencing the same thing. I love how you expressed it with the lines "And so, in my life you remain, a tear upon my lash."

    Very well done.
    Thanks for your kind words on my poem.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    April 21, 2007

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    I tell my heart I don't want you here,
    and let me, for my own sake, cry...

    Indeed very heartfelt write and you touched the truth of life which lies in a drop of tear..Thank you so much for your entry in my contest...


  • Blue Azure
    April 21, 2007

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    aw, i loved that image of an uncried tear. great ending. really liked the lines 'and so, inmy life you remain, a tear upon my lash'. something unique and lovely about this. god luck with the contest.


  • Twins 4 me
    April 20, 2007
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    Great write and so full of emotion! Good luck in the contest!

  • BehindTheseEyes03
    April 20, 2007

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    This is a really good poem. I really know where you are coming from with this. I do think that the ending could be a little stronger tho. The whole thing was great, and then the ending was a little disappointing. Good luck in the contest!!


  • Marc-Andrews
    April 20, 2007

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    Awwwww thats sad.... I understand that conflicted feeling....
    I would say i'm here for you... But thats the last thing you need atm lol...

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