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A Dream That Can Never Be


I close my eyes
And when I open them
I find myself on a balcony
Overlooking the ocean
I hear a crying a baby
So I walked down the hallway
And stopped at the door
The sound was coming from the other side
I open the door
And inside was a crib
On the headboard
A name is engraved
“Aden” it spelled
I picked up the baby
And lullaby him back to sleep
As he fell asleep
I placed him back down
And kissed his forehead
As I left the room
Slowly closing the door
Trying not to awake the baby
I look around the hallway
And find two doors and a stairwell
On the first door a named is engraved
“Stacy” it spelled
As I opened the door I peaked
I see a room painted in murals
The walls was pictures of meadows
A river with ducks bathing
I find a little girl on the bed
Sleeping peacefully
I smile and leaned
And kissed her forehead
I left that room
And stood at the next
Staring at name
“Nicolae” it said
I open the door
And entered the room
Finding the room painted in green
I approached his bed
Where I picked up his blanket
And placed it on him
He was a cute child
With a tough look on his face
I kissed him on his forehead
And left for the stairwell
As I reach the top
I find a hallway
On the end a door
As I walked in that door
I see a big bed
A comfortable looking bed
As I walked by the side of the bed
A woman comes out of the sheets
“Good morning love” she said
At the sight of her
And from the sound of the phrase
I realized who it was
And a great big smile filled my face
I walked to her bed side
Where I kneeled
Her face by my face
Smiling with joy and happiness
“I love you” she said
As we both get closer
For one loving kiss
Everything turned black
And as I opened my eyes
Where I find myself on my bed
Realizing it was a dream
A dream full of hope and desire
A dream that will never be

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A dream full of hope and desire
A dream that will never be

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  • Heavenly Angel gold member
    December 10, 2007
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    Poignant and sad..
    Thank you for sharing and for being a part of the contest!


  • freestallion
    August 29, 2007

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    You did not write which option this goes under...if you don't do so (and fix your spelling/grammar) I will DQ the poem.

  • AlternateCandidate
    July 9, 2007
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    You need to actually read the rules of the contest. You also need to check your spelling.


  • Dark Whispers
    June 19, 2007

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    this poem exceded the line limit but you also did not put the form used for the poem in your authors notes . great write


  • Black Raevyn
    June 12, 2007

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    Nice

    I like how you have written this poem, it has a suspence to it, not knowing what is happening until the end. Good work.

    ~Best Wishes~


  • duana
    May 27, 2007
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    excellent- just beautiful- well desrving of your trophies.


  • Florida Sunshine
    May 27, 2007

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    Thats simply tender~ Its a terrific poem all together~ Nice job! Thanks so much for entering my 2nd chance contest!


  • BurnBrandMemory
    May 17, 2007
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    I don't care what anyone says, this poem is beautiful and i LOVE it. i didn't have to go back, read it five times to understand what it meant! Which makes me greatful because I have been having to read poems 4 times to fully understand their concept! Thank you so much for entering, and good luck in my contest!


  • Cavca
    May 13, 2007

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    Sad. Well, you changed tenses a few times. It would be better if you used punctuation. That way it is easier to read. It would help the flow. Other than that, good job. Good luck in my contest.


  • love my jose luis
    May 10, 2007

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    I liked this poem, definately not the worst ever written, all I can say is that the flow needs a little work. Other than that I think it's actually pretty good.
    ~Alix


  • Poetic Aphrodite
    April 20, 2007
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    Thankyou for your beautiful entry, Bella

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