The stars are singing
their songs of primal passion
and my soul responds.
Hot, seductive sounds,
fashioned in the fiery heat
of Heaven's furnace.
My heart is pounding
to the symphonic grandeur
of God's creation.
Author notes
Haiku chain
A contest entry
- Seventeen syllables by Hiatus.
1350 points, ended May 1, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Hornswaggle's Gold by Acidanthra.
400 points, ended October 2, 2007, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Lights In The Sky by hotchocolate.
450 points, ended September 11, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This was well done!
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Great poem you have here
Short yet packs a heck of a punch
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great write bill much packed in to such a short piece.great use of language well done to you
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Hard one - this competition - suited to your style though, I like this, what I would like to see you write is an epic, you have great language skills, would be interested to see a long narrative peice.
Like dhte first and last verse particularly.
James
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Of the Heavens!
Dear Bad Bill,
Wonderful set of chains!
The heavens are an excellent choice for your theme.
Good Luck in the contest!
Tang
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adorable.
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superb
excellent bill, you've done a great job here, you've made it look so easy! good luck in the contest mate,
Alex.
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Great write and and uplifting! Good luck in the contest!
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Brilliant!
These are wonderful, my friend! Each one is a gem and they combine to make a beautiful song of life. I love
these and they brightened my morning.
hugs Wolfie
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I think you did very well with the sixteen syllables, and the actual poem was very nice , please return the favor
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I dunno much about haiku, but this poem has made the limited space so..cute and beautiful. Nice. regards.
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