A heart so cold
A mind so blank
And eyes so blind
Blood dripping from her hands
"what is life!" She cries
Blood draining from the cuts on her skin
A heart of stone could never break
Until now
Her mind lay confused
her stone heart in millions of peices
"WHY HIM, WHY NOW!"
the one she loved
the one that loved her
had finally given up and disappeared in the dark
He left her so cold
so alone
She finally lay still on her cold basement floor
the life she once knew gone from her hands
A contest entry
- Love and Deciet by Simply a Memory.
300 points, ended June 29, 2007, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
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650 points, ended November 8, 2007, 35 entries
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so im guessing
you would like to be my emo friend?
you need a hug. (hug)
Abby -
There is kind of a blank, cold cruelty lying beneath this poem, but it sets the tone for the piece. A line I really lIked was "A heart of stone could never break/Until Now" Great image.
Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest! -
I loved this. This is exactly how I feel. This is exactly what has happened. Thank you soooo much.
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I feel the finality of it. The coldness, the cruelness that lay there in between the lines. Well done. Keep the ink flowing and good luck. Love and hugs...
~Donna~
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Wow, now thats what I meant when I said make me feel it. I now officaly have chills. Thank-You!!!!
You are very talented.
Thanks for entering good luck!!
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very good
but is this a real life experieance? so whats it about you and chris? -
Love must be tempered by hate. Misery with joy. Otherwise we wouldn't understand the true meaning of joy and love.
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