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For Ashely...

Drowning in pain
Drowning in sorrow
I know I can forgive you
But I won't see you tomorrow

Full of fear
Full of spite
Everlasting love
I try with all my might

It may not be here
It may be very far
I will wait for you
Counting every scar

I will think of you tomorrow
As I have done today
All the comfort in this world
Cannot take this pain away

So I will wait for now
And wish for hope
Pray that someday
I may learn to cope

Author notes

This is for one of my AP Favorites she is  a really cool and nice girl but is having a little bit of a time right now. I just wanted her to know that I understand and feel her pain. I will be here for you girl just let me know what I can do!!!

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  • th3sl4y3r
    May 18, 2007

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    This is very well written poem... the flow and rhythm are great, just a few little spots here and there that could be polished, the last line of the first stanza could be, trying with all my might, and the third line of the last stanza could be, I pray that someday.. they are fine the way they are though... The rhyming of this is so smooth and they don't seem forced at all.. I love the structure of this, it gives it a real beat.. I really like these lines...
    "I will think of you tomorrow
    As I have done today
    All the comfort in this world
    Cannot take this pain away"
    very well written, well done!!
    thank you for entering my contest and good luck..
    peace and light always.


    • Love-Lee
      May 26, 2007
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      I truly thank you!

      But I am in no way religious so I try to stay away from the pray and God and what have you... I do agreethat it would be beautiful! And this was wrote for a friend who has since seen it and i do not feel it would be just changing it after she has recieved it! Thanks again though!


  • Forgotten Anomaly
    April 23, 2007

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    At first i though it was ganna be another why me poem or suicide one but i was plesently surprised. I like how you spoke of suport and hope at the same time of pain and depression.


  • smntha.
    April 20, 2007

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    This is so beautiful. I LOVED this so much! It's so sweet and just the emotion in it almost took my breath away! Great job! Good luck!!!


  • ashley loves josh
    April 20, 2007
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    WHO IS THIS ABOUT??

    I LIKED IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    • Love-Lee
      April 20, 2007
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      OMG!

      Lets see... Actually I think I will just make it easy it is you ya nut!

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