She looks right at me,
Her fingertips outstretched
A whisper on her lips
She is a dream lover.
A Fantasy created solely
Within this fragile world
That I like to wander in.
Alone When Time Allows
The end result is always
That I never finish dreaming
Her eyes always brightly shine.
She is the myth,
Dreams made flesh.
And She belongs to me.
In this world of my own
Please tell me what you think
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i like this..very ethereal
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Such dreams, they make waking up feel so much more terribler.
But what is worse still, are the day dreams.
They haunt every moment of concious thought.
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"The end result is always
That I never finish dreaming
Her eyes always brightly shine."
Very beautiful, heartfelt and sad. You have shown real depth of emotion within this and I feel it is beautifully done.
Well done.
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Don't dream it. live it.
"A Fantasy created solely
Within this fragile world
That I like to wander in.
Alone When Time Allow"
This is a line I can deeply relate to. I too had a recurring dream about a lover, probably started when I was fifteen. This dream lover was my muse and at sixteen, I went to Europe in search of her...never found her. Only years later I met her and ironically she was really under my nose, we even have a common friend. So yip, that's how I can relate.
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wow thats beautiful, you seem very romantic any girl is lucky too have you... it is very wonderious, i like the fantasy created
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i loved this, you have created a beautiful thought provoking poem here
She is the myth,
Dreams made flesh. amazing lines well done xx
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She is the myth,
Dreams made flesh.
And She belongs to me.
In this world of my own
I really adore your love which you have shown here..this is just a melody of your heart...It is beautiful description of the love and its pace with the mode and the structure of the race of the momments shown here..I appreciate the depth and the touches of the love which are just true to the heart and soul as welldone..
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dream lovers are the best lovers. i like the end the best and i like your phrasing too!
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I love this poem!!! Especially line that says "Alone when time allows" that tells us we are not welcomed to tag along lol!!! Great write!
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The flow and rhythm of this piece go so well with what you have say that the entire poem just seems to mesh well. Even the title seems quite fitting. Nice job! Thank you for sharing this with us at Allpoetry.
♥ Touchof1der
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What a truly beautiful write this is; one I can so very much relate to!
Loved this! It's beautiful! Wishing you all the best in your writing endeavors! -
This is such a lovely poem. "The end result is always That I never finish dreaming". I loved this line. It spoke such volumes to me. Well done on this amazing poem.
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this is a great poem, it made me think about me being stuck in a whole where all I had were my dreams to comfort me
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