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Every Word The Truth (Bronze Trophy)

Every Word the Truth

I put out the
And gazed at the s in the sky
Poured myself one more
Sat alone and began to

I know it’s to say
I feel so unloved and
So many haunt me
Our has become unspoken

You made me with your lies
Left me all alone to sit
Your words are driving me
And I feel like a pile of

Now I’m smokin’ with the
A three times a day
Drinking by the gallon
I can’t go on, no way

I thought that you me
That to me you’d always be true
You plied me with
You wanted to have your and eat it too

So go on with your , say what you want
It doesn’t matter anymore
me out, toss me aside
I’m headed out the door

(Forgive me but this is a silly group contest poem.
Our host went a bit )

Dee Garner
© April 19, 2007
wait… do I really want to copyright this


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  • Blankscreen2222
    September 28, 2007
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    I have never come across anything like this one before.
    I love what you have done with the emoticons, it makes this such a fab fun read.
    The rhyme and story part is very clever and with the added extras made it humourous.
    I've laughed lots at the way you slotted the emoticons in.
    After a 2nd read I realised that this was a clever way of masking what is really underneath quite a sad piece.

    Extremely well done.
    Congrats on the trophy. a deserved win.


  • rite
    April 30, 2007

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    This must be the most creative use of emoticons I've seen sofar. It wasn't at all what I expected after reading the title, but it was quite nice to read a poem like this for a change. Must have been A LOT of work to make this one! Thank you for creating and sharing. Take care,

    U


  • Partners In Crime
    April 27, 2007
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    It's voting time


  • Sarah957
    April 26, 2007

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    Dee,
    How in the world did you take these little emoticons and paint such a serious and emotional poem? And where in the world did you find all these little pictures? I have thought about entering the contest but I dont know how to use more than a handful of emoticons. I was really impressed with this! Good luck in the contest.
    Sarah


    • catz Moderators member
      April 27, 2007
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      Thank you Sarah for such a nice comment.
      You can find the emoticons in a column by Barbara

      http://allpoetry.com/column/show/306041

      And she tries to keep it updated as we get new ones. I have this column in my bookmarks so I can get to it easily

      Dee


  • Quiet places
    April 24, 2007

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    Creative humor!

    This is great Dee!! What a creative write this is. I see you are battling with the "Should I" syndrome X. What the hell it'll fly, I'm sure of it!! I got a gold on Poop!! Can you see that coming! HA!, Don

    • catz Moderators member
      April 24, 2007

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      Lol... thanks, Don. This is a fun contest but for a long time mine was the only entry and I felt awful posting it. I was sure glad when the others started posting theirs... you know the old saying, misery loves company


      Dee


      • Quiet places
        April 24, 2007
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        Indeed!! My Friend

        I'll betthat was a little strange at first huh! The rest were waiting for a leader, HA!, Don


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    April 23, 2007

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    excellent~

    Love the emoticions in this sis...
    But you are definitely not unloved...
    I love love love ya
    Best of luck in the contest....sad but loved the cute emotions....
    PS Got my car runs like a top and got 2nd place for the haiku's I hope ya get a trophy for this one sweet sis....
    Love ya
    Your sis
    Susan~~~


  • individuality gold member
    April 21, 2007

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    this brought a smile to my face despite the sad topic of being unloved here. well fret not dear dee, here's a from me, and some but please keep the spuddy off it.

    • catz Moderators member
      April 24, 2007
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      Awww, thanks, Ian. I don't feel unloved, though, just kinda stupid for posting this, but the contest is fun. I'm getting a kick out of it now
      luv and
      Dee


  • Wesley Storer
    April 21, 2007

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    Well, don't smoke too much! I too, have felt unloved in the past, but I now believe it doesn't matter if you are not loved, only that you love.

    • catz Moderators member
      April 21, 2007
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      I love your response, Wesley... it doesn't matter if we are not loved, only that we love. You are so right. I believe that's what we're put on this earth for, to learn to love, in whatever form the lessons are presented.

      Thanks for reading and commenting on this silly piece. I hope you take a look at the others in the contest, too... write a poem using emoticons... who'da thought


      Dee


  • poetryality silver member
    April 21, 2007

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    I held a contest like this a couple of years ago. LOL This one is quite advanced. We didn't have the privilege of this many emoticons nor were they as cleverly used by anyone who submitted to the contest. This was fascinating to read and made me chuckle out loud. Shhh...everyone in this house is asleep. I hope I don't wake them. Awww you should never feel like a pile of ". Hahahaha I hope win win this challenge. Great!


    Much Love ♥

    Renee

    • catz Moderators member
      April 21, 2007
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      Thank you, Renee for reading and commenting, I'm glad you enjoyed it It was fun writing it in spite of my bitchin'and moanin' about it... it was all a put on anyway

      Yeah, our emoticons have come a long way since the old days, haven't they.

      love and
      Dee


  • queen Moderators member
    April 20, 2007

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    I love this poem, good luck in the contest


    • catz Moderators member
      April 21, 2007
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      Thanks, Queen... now where's YOUR entry???


  • countrybabe gold member
    April 20, 2007

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    Excellent Piece

    This is too cool. I loved the way you put the emoticons into the poem. Well done. Good luck to you in this contest.

    Keep writing

    Countrybabe

    • catz Moderators member
      April 21, 2007
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      Thank you It was fun writing this, but I still feel a little bit stupid about it... Dove's gonna pay for this


  • J aime Coudre silver member
    April 20, 2007

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    OH MY GAWD...

    this is hillerous (sp) ...my problem is I don't know any emotions(sp again) see I can't even spell it let alone write with them...Well, I do know the smilies...Could I just do a lot of applauses if I can remember how to do them...
    That is the extent of my knowledge

    • catz Moderators member
      April 20, 2007
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      You can find the emoticons in a special column ...
      http://allpoetry.com/column/show/306041

      Okay, no more excuses

      Thanks for the cool comment, Darlene. It was fun to write even if I am a bit embarrassed t post it. But so what, I'll live through it

      Dee


  • angelica silver member
    April 20, 2007

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    or not Dee I got a good out of this. I give you a for this. Don't feel like a and don't be here's a to get you through the day and be sit down and have a or another COZ I it!
    ica


  • Kari gold member
    April 20, 2007

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    LOL Granna, I so loved this. It's so funny and the emotions in it Well done Granna and the best of luck to you in the contest!
    Kari

  • pozo
    April 20, 2007

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    Interesting write. I liked how you used the emoticons here
    Good luck.
    Thanks for your comment
    Pozo

    • catz Moderators member
      April 20, 2007
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      Thanks for reading this silly thing, pozo. I'm a little embarrassed to post it but Dove drove me to it, it's all her fault


  • FifthDove
    April 20, 2007

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    hahahaha
    I know the host went a lot

    love it, love it, love it...

    The pile of was so funny and I related


  • Manoj Sanyal
    April 20, 2007

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    Hahaha!!! ... it is too good.... enjoyed.
    manoj

    • catz Moderators member
      April 20, 2007
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      Lol, thank you for reading this silly thing. I'm glad you enjoyed it. It's for a group contest... I think our host went a bit


      love and
      Dee

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