The Georgian Mansion stood vacant and gray
A reminder of its glorious bygone days,
Now ominous and dark like a sorrowful hearse
Abandoned by the family because of a curse.
It started rather abruptly one blustery autumn day
When a weary stranger happened by and was invited to stay,
For the family that lived there were known to be kind
And so he accepted their invite and with them he dined.
The meal was sumptuous and as the stranger did dine
He remarked at the décor and the furniture so fine,
He also carried on about not having a home
And wished that such a house could somehow be his own.
And so continued his covetous ranting discourse
About a house he clearly wished to own,
Until that fateful moment, when carelessly he swallowed
And began choking on a baked chicken bone.
Terrified were the hosts who knew not what to do
But only stared as their guest turned blue!
And as the stranger collapsed he fell straight back,
Falling dead in horrid plain view.
Knowing not who he was nor his next of kin
They arranged to have him buried near by
On a parcel of land with a view that was grand,
Under an oak tree that reached to the sky.
Then one dark stormy Halloween night
While family and friends came together,
Stood the stranger at the gate who could not wait
To join them and get out of the weather.
Author notes
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Comments
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Frightfully Great!
This poem has all of the elements of a creepy ghost story, and the picture gives it the finishing touch! The house reminds me of the Haunted Mansion at Disneyland. This is the first poem of yours that I've read, and I love it...can't wait to read more. This is a great line: "Now ominous and dark like a sorrowful hearse". Methinks you may be a "Master of the Macabre" ;-).
Boofully yours,
Linda :-)

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excellent
I love haunting poems like this
Excellent and the pic just adds perfectly to the poem
Nice to meet you as well and best of luck in the contest
Hugs
Susan~~~




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Thanks for reading, glad to meet you hun.
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This poem is brilliant! Exactly what I was looking for - thank you soooo much for entering this piece of magnificience!
"And so continued his covetous ranting discourse
About a house he clearly wished to own,
Until that fateful moment, when carelessly he swallowed
And began choking on a baked chicken bone."
- this stanza kinda made me laugh! An interesting twist here!
"Then one dark stormy Halloween night
While family and friends came together,
Stood the stranger at the gate who could not wait
To join them and get out of the weather."
- whoa.. crreeeeeepy but absolutely love it!
Thanks again!
Blessings,
~M

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Great entry - thanks and best of luck.
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i thoroghly enjoy this one. very talented., and quite creepy!
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Let us hope there was no more chicken on the BBQ.Good story, Ros
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Thanks for your entry
Creepy and Spooky, you kind of left it hanging there, I was like, huh? Wha- What happened
. Nice job, good imagery and appropriate spookiness
Good flow and strucutre.
Happy Halloween!
Tammy
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Spooky! I love it. The rhyme and rhythm complete each other and help make this a magnificent piece. Very spooky indeed.
Keep up the good work, congrats on the win, and good luck in the contest
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Cool and creepy. Very well told tale, flows very well. Good luck in the contest!


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Groovy
I'm going to have this in mind on Halloween '08, for certain. Perhaps I won't entertain any guests at my home until then...

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oh ho ho, VERY creepy! scary even!
You definatly gave me something different!
You have a talent for rhyme. None of it sound fourced.
The story line was great.
All in all, you did a very nice job! Bravo!
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It's a haunting story, but I think it'd be better expressed through prose instead of rhyming poetry. Just an opinion, thank you for entering and good luck!
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Ah thats neat. The manor reminded me of the one in Casper. Nice story behind all this. I liked the rhyme.
Good luck.
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It was really creepy and I liked it alot. Thank you for entering and good luck with this poem!
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wow that was very cool. it kinda had an abrupted ending but it was very exiting to read. it's kinda like a goast that couldn't go to rest. (or whatever that things is when goast who keep reapearing because they can't die fully)
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This is really good. My favourite lines were
Then one stormy Halloween night
While family and friends came together,
Outside at the gate, stood the stranger who could not wait
To join them and get out of the weather
Eerie and full of suspense and lore - loved it and well done - good luck to you.
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