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The Curse of Grey Manor

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The Georgian Mansion stood vacant and gray
A reminder of its glorious bygone days,
Now ominous and dark like a sorrowful hearse
Abandoned by the family because of a curse.

It started rather abruptly one blustery autumn day
When a weary stranger happened by and was invited to stay,
For the family that lived there were known to be kind
And so he accepted their invite and with them he dined.

The meal was sumptuous and as the stranger did dine
He remarked at the décor and the furniture so fine,
He also carried on about not having a home
And wished that such a house could somehow be his own.

And so continued his covetous ranting discourse
About a house he clearly wished to own,
Until that fateful moment, when carelessly he swallowed
And began choking on a baked chicken bone.

Terrified were the hosts who knew not what to do
But only stared as their guest turned blue!
And as the stranger collapsed he fell straight back,
Falling dead in horrid plain view.

Knowing not who he was nor his next of kin
They arranged to have him buried near by
On a parcel of land with a view that was grand,
Under an oak tree that reached to the sky.

Then one dark stormy Halloween night
While family and friends came together,
Stood the stranger at the gate who could not wait
To join them and get out of the weather.

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  • Linrose
    March 25

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    Frightfully Great!

    This poem has all of the elements of a creepy ghost story, and the picture gives it the finishing touch! The house reminds me of the Haunted Mansion at Disneyland. This is the first poem of yours that I've read, and I love it...can't wait to read more. This is a great line: "Now ominous and dark like a sorrowful hearse". Methinks you may be a "Master of the Macabre" ;-).

    Boofully yours,
    Linda :-)


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    September 27, 2008

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    excellent

    I love haunting poems like this
    Excellent and the pic just adds perfectly to the poem
    Nice to meet you as well and best of luck in the contest
    Hugs
    Susan~~~


  • Rinoasis
    September 27, 2008

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    This poem is brilliant! Exactly what I was looking for - thank you soooo much for entering this piece of magnificience!

    "And so continued his covetous ranting discourse
    About a house he clearly wished to own,
    Until that fateful moment, when carelessly he swallowed
    And began choking on a baked chicken bone."
    - this stanza kinda made me laugh! An interesting twist here!

    "Then one dark stormy Halloween night
    While family and friends came together,
    Stood the stranger at the gate who could not wait
    To join them and get out of the weather."
    - whoa.. crreeeeeepy but absolutely love it!

    Thanks again!
    Blessings,
    ~M


  • BabyBun silver member
    August 18, 2008
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    Great entry - thanks and best of luck.


  • A Citys Ember
    July 11, 2008
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    i thoroghly enjoy this one. very talented., and quite creepy!


  • Gwenevere
    May 25, 2008
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    Let us hope there was no more chicken on the BBQ.Good story, Ros


  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    October 31, 2007

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    Thanks for your entry

    Creepy and Spooky, you kind of left it hanging there, I was like, huh? Wha- What happened . Nice job, good imagery and appropriate spookiness Good flow and strucutre.

    Happy Halloween!
    Tammy


  • Silly Rabbit.
    October 7, 2007

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    Spooky! I love it. The rhyme and rhythm complete each other and help make this a magnificent piece. Very spooky indeed.
    Keep up the good work, congrats on the win, and good luck in the contest


  • LadyDementia gold member
    September 22, 2007
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    Cool and creepy. Very well told tale, flows very well. Good luck in the contest!


  • Green Manalishi gold member
    July 28, 2007

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    Groovy

    I'm going to have this in mind on Halloween '08, for certain. Perhaps I won't entertain any guests at my home until then...


  • AshesFromFire
    June 18, 2007

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    oh ho ho, VERY creepy! scary even!
    You definatly gave me something different!
    You have a talent for rhyme. None of it sound fourced.
    The story line was great.
    All in all, you did a very nice job! Bravo!
    Great job! Good luck!


  • renizzle
    June 4, 2007

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    It's a haunting story, but I think it'd be better expressed through prose instead of rhyming poetry. Just an opinion, thank you for entering and good luck!


  • animated lies
    May 30, 2007

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    Ah thats neat. The manor reminded me of the one in Casper. Nice story behind all this. I liked the rhyme.

    Good luck.
    animated ♥


  • Megan Awesome
    May 20, 2007

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    It was really creepy and I liked it alot. Thank you for entering and good luck with this poem!
    Megan


  • Childsight
    May 16, 2007

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    wow that was very cool. it kinda had an abrupted ending but it was very exiting to read. it's kinda like a goast that couldn't go to rest. (or whatever that things is when goast who keep reapearing because they can't die fully)


  • XxGoldenxXDawnxX
    April 29, 2007
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    This is really good. My favourite lines were

    Then one stormy Halloween night
    While family and friends came together,
    Outside at the gate, stood the stranger who could not wait
    To join them and get out of the weather

    Eerie and full of suspense and lore - loved it and well done - good luck to you.

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