She bears the wisdom of her years,
lessons learned, some the hard way,
eyes filmed to milky white,
once smooth skin now wrinkled and loose,
hair once glossy black,
streaks of grey and white reside....
bright black eyes glow with intelligence,
feathers shine blue-black in the sun,
free to fly where the winds roam,
messengers with the words of the Gods,
passing their wisdom to humans.....
both are the root and tree,
the past and future of the tribe,
wisdom of age and the Gods,
where Man resides.
In a list
A contest entry
- Crow Gathering Crone Wisdom - One day contest by CarolDesjarlais.
525 points, ended April 20, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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good description
powerful imagery
neat word use.
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Wow you have put such incredible imagery and description into this poem. You really captivate the reader and bring them into your words for more. This could go a variety of ways and could be described in a variety of ways and I think that is the best part of poetry like this. The figuring out of the meaning behind each poem. Very nicely done with this one! Cannot wait to read more of your work!
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Makes me Experience Wonderment
This poem made me wonder whether the subject is a woman, a bird, a tree, or a bird/woman/tree.
I love the lines about the hair transforming from solid black to streaked with gray. I also love the line "bright black eyes glow with intelligence." There are some golden bits in this piece. -
Wonderful...!!!!!!
Excellent work! I would say it takes great wisdom to let your imagination fly so you can write about a crow gathering wisdom over the years. Maybe it came easily to you, but this poem is a result of hard work, I should say! Too good. The linking of the bird with the Supreme Power and then the journey back to Earth ... is simply superb. Well done. Good luck and God bless -
Great. Good job. I love this part :both are the root and tree,
the past and future of the tribe,
wisdom of age and the Gods,
where Man resides.
Good luck in the contest!!
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EXCELLENT AND HEART FELT
Yes both are the root and the tree for you cant have one without the other . And the wisdom passed down through time from one to another keeps the wind under the eagles wings to sore another day
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Excellent
Excellent write..Words that speak to the heart..
Betty
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Thats an amazing poem. well written and well, i hope you did well in the contest.lol.
"She bears the wisdom of her years,
lessons learned, some the hard way,
eyes filmed to milky white,
once smooth skin now wrinkled and loose,
hair once glossy black,
streaks of grey and white reside...."
Tis a truly beautiful poem..
Keep writting
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Your mentionings of 'roots and trees' reminds me of an excerpt from 'What if a Much of a Which of a Wind' by E.E Cummings : 'Whose roots are trees , it's they who shall cry hello'. nice to see how you achieve a state of coalescence in our poem by stating that wisdom in looking at life as a whole . A work of patience and experience . Nice job .
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Merry meet Leaf,
Thank you for stopping by to comment on my work.
Amythest
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"both are the root and tree,
the past and future of the tribe,
wisdom of age and the Gods,
where Man resides."
I know, seems a little repetitive to hear that everyone loves the same part, but you... have created a wonderful ending within a poem that has touched me so hard. A little siomplicity can go a long way.
You did an awesome job!
Well done.
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Merry meet Darkness,
Thank you very much for your grins and for your kind comments. Praise, if truely deserved, is never repetitive.
Thank you.
Amythest
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both are the root and tree,
the past and future of the tribe,
wisdom of age and the Gods,
where Man resides...
I do agreewwith the truth stated in this great write and it is the saatory ofa this world and its definations as well...so true and so inspiring and touching the depth of this creation and brings the philosophy of the life just up on the muse of the readers here...Indeed it is very beautiful work scripted by the soul of the poet with great immagery as well... I love it...
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Merry meet PrabhuDayal,
Thank you for your kind comments on my work. I appreciate your taking the time to do so. Thank you.
Amythest
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loving this!
I love this poem!!!! Like all of your poetry, this is amazing and I loved reading it...you should win the gold trophy for all your poetry...it's sublime and inspirational
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Merry meet Crystal,
Thank you my dear for your applause and wonderful comments. Alas, I did not place with this piece, but who knows next time.
Amythest
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I hear the ancient words of a crone in this lovely poem...thank you so much for sharing it in this contest.
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