In pools bloom lotuses
as large as wheels
subtle rare and pure they grow
Author notes
I tried
A contest entry
- Haiku Contest!! by KnightOfTheRose.
325 points, ended April 29, 2007, 39 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Celebrating 150 by intanglio2ring.
750 points, ended May 23, 2007, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I think you've done a great job with this ... the first two lines are particularly effective. x
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Like a painting!
A gentle haiku that paints a serene picture.
Thanks for your entry & Good Luck in my contest!
Tang
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It seems as though your efforts in trying really showed your talent! You leave the reader with a wonderful image for sure!
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You put in your author notes 'I tried', you certainly did and dont give up, your images are good and you have a way with words.
Keep trying...Sue
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Such a great imagery I envision here.
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funny, I must have subconciously remembered your title before I wrote 'Lagoon' (I hope that comes across as 'you've inspired me', and not 'here's a plug'!)
To your content and style; the syllabic count is all wrong. I do like your style though, your atmosphere is very good, very visual, you just have to follow the 5/7/5 rule for it to be Haiku.
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Very nice picture you painted here.
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I love lotus blossoms, welcome to the group.
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hmm its interesting... i like the words
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"I tried" well you succeeded! this is a really well written haiku! great job!!! I really enjoyed reading this piece!! thank you sooooooo much for entering!!! excellent work and the best of luck in my contest!!!
-Steve-
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