The first flesh torn,
it cuts real deep,
happiness gone
no dreams as I sleep.
Turning and turning,
my dreams come awake,
cutting deeper, screaming
how much can I take.
Damn this life
it cuts so near,
the sharpest edges come
on the things you most fear.
A contest entry
- AnYtHiNg by smntha..
550 points, ended May 5, 2007, 14 entries
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Great write Rochelle ...
I hope with time some of this fear will be replaced with knowing you are loved and cared for. My best to you dear! -
This is really good! I loved the darkness, and the emotion. It was so painful, yet so beautiful. Great poem! Good luck!!!
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WHOA THIS IS BY FAR MY MOST FAVORITE. That's raw emotion and I know exactly how you feel. I love the darkness yet all the truth that lies beneath. The wording is perfect..the length remarkable. It's amazing how you told so much with so very few words!!! bravo! <3 I wish I could applaud you more than 3~lol~
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thanxs im glad you liked it
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very good. it gets to the point
i know -
great
i love it i can relate to t very much nice job keep em comein
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Just so true and how fucking painful it really is, my deep loneliness and sadness, oh how it rapes me, prison heart and burning soul,aching so much....
How every can very relate to this
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