Once again I hear the sound,
the voice that will be my death.
Telling me of my anger within,
and the hate that's on my breath.
I wish it away I wish it gone,
but it always seems to stay.
Waiting for me to show my doubt,
so it can have it's way.
Focus your mind and stay in control,
I say to myself each night.
Darkness comes and gives it strengh,
from then on I have to fight.
But I know soon the day will come,
when I finally lose control.
To delay that day as long as I can,
is my one and only goal.
A contest entry
- For All The Broken Guys and Dolls... by Miss Faerie.
525 points, ended April 25, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I Don't Know by Pollycheck.
450 points, ended April 29, 2007, 137 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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YES
...I am breathless, I think it is so well written...I like your rhyme scheme....and well ummm I can relate to the entire poem. Its inspiring that you would write on such a topic.
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Intriguing.
Well I must say that the talent you have for poetry far outweighs your outlook on life. I liked this poem for it flowed vey well and rhyming was unnoticeable which is the sign (to me at least) of a good poet. Your poem is extremely interesting (as well as your author's page) and I wonder if some of the cynicism is as deep as you portray. I think you have more character than you think and this will pull you through so mate, walk out into the sunlight, out of the darkness and see.
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Thank you for entering my contest and good luck. I think that you have written a godd poem about the struggles that most people go through. We all doubt, but most are able to control those doubts.
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Thank you for entering
There's never a way to just escape the pain in our head, and the images that we will suffer with forever..
This was well done. A little forced, but not to the point where it threw it off for me. Well done
Faerie
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i like it
i like it a lot...but i wrote it,lol
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