he sliced
the meat to invisibility--
off the bones,
out of the skin,
into his mouth.
then excused himself from the table
set for two.
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Author notes
option 2.
will enter something else later.
-crash ♥
alright wow, this sucks.
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A contest entry
- spread your wings, before they fall apart. by -foreverandever.
800 points, ended May 15, 2007, 30 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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okay so it really doesn't suck.
not in the slightest.
in fact, i love it. it's pretty much perfect, sad and fragile and like someone holding their breath for as long as they possibly can.
thank you for entering
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oh good! I'm glad you like it... !!
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Meat ... I have a thing with it. Always reminds me of human meat and cannibalism. I like the second stanza ... I can see it happening, kind of sickening but that's the way my mind goes.
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I know what you mean.
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it does not suck xxxx
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the impeccable cereal killer, Che Rios, strikes again.
Seriously, I actually think this is an effective metaphor for how people treat each other. Another stunning little write.
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Alright, wow.
It doesn't suck.
I love it.
Bookmarking it.
♥
~Princess of Shadows~ -
ack.
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Sad
Makes me think
its been a hard week
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