I remember going out for ice cream
A promised treat from my dad
Good little girls get ice cream
I remember I was a good girl
I remember him sitting
Right next to me in the booth
Helping me finish two scoops
I remember insisting on two scoops
What flavor?
I don't remember
But I do remember that day.
I remember sitting on the porch
Staring down at my feet
I remember pink high top sneakers
My very favorite pair
I remember the laces
Bright yellow and broken
Eaten by the chain of my bike
A scar on my knee
Where from?
I can't remember
But I do remember that day.
I remember my dad walking
Right out the door
Right down the steps
Carrying box after box
I remember him getting in his car
Starting the engine,it took three tries
I remember him driving down the street
Yelling something back at me
What he said?
I can't remember
But I do remember that day.
I remember the emotions I felt
Wondering if I'd ever see him again
Worried he'd forget about me
Terrified he wanted to forget
I remember the tears
Sliding down my cheek
I cried for so long
How long?
I can't remember
But I do remember that day ...
Oh how I remember that day.
Author notes
Written July 18th, 2003
A contest entry
- Past Memories by SilverxXxShadow.
250 points, ended July 24, 2003, 27 entries
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Comments
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I agree with BrownEyedGirl, this is a very intense and powerful piece. The imagrey in this was awesome. You wrote about everything right down to your 'bright yellow show laces eaten by the chain of your bike.' You used a lot of description in this as if it was right from your memory...just what I'm looking for. I really loved reading this poem. Thank you for entering my contest...Good luck.
~Shadow -
Wow. A very intense and powerful story. i liked your description and how you set up a scene for the reader. great job!
take care,
mollie
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