You knew that you would die this day
And yet you still stood in the way
Blood in your breath
There's no strength left
You saved your fellow man from death
A human shield, you sacrificed
the winter blossom of your life
Fire in your eyes
You've no goodbyes
Your final memory is their cries
Your father saw the holocaust
and in those camps, you too were lost
in hatred's grasp
until at last
those fear filled yesterdays had passed
Your name means "Lily"
Flower of peace
Your floating soul
is now released
A contest entry
- In the Wake of Tragedy by SheistheLorax.
550 points, ended May 6, 2007, 16 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - In Honor Of Virginia Tech. by One Eunique Pixie.
575 points, ended April 23, 2007, 22 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - your best work composed over the last twelve months by Lute.
600 points, ended January 9, 2008, 68 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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It was recommended by someone I check out this poem. It brought tears to my eyes. His sacrifice is well remembered, and now, annotated. Well done.
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This is a true story?
I'm amazed that I've heard nothing about it at all. He certainly must have been a remarkable person.
Congrats on taking the time to write this to bring it to the attention of others.
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awsome tribute!
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Tribute
I really like this.
A fitting tribute,
To a man who gave his life,
In protection to his students.
Their could've been no better professor.
He taught the greatest lesson that day.
One that only soldiers learn.
To protect what you believe in,
No matter the cost.
Well done.
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Ahh, this poem is absolutely beautiful & a fitting homage to this wonderful man who risked his life for his students. I thought it was so sweet yet beautiful & serene. I love the ending. Definitely worthy of your trophies. I especially liked, "
Your name means "Lily"
Flower of peace
Your floating soul
is now released
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I'm glad you picked up on this overseas. I oughta write a companion piece regarding the bag of dirt that shot him, but it wouldn't be suitable reading even for prison inmates. I'm not sure there are even words contemptible enough to do it justice. Nah, I'll just bask in the beautiful tribute that you've penned for this heroic professor and let the belligerent homicidal imbecile fade into a despised obscurity.
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I can't say anything that has not been said by someone else so far. There are few true heroes left in this world and it is so refreshing to see that someone remembers and eternalizes his life and his selfless death with such beautiful words as this. You truly showed your admiration and respect,
reenie
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Oh my gosh! This is an absolutely splendid trubite to a wise, wonderful and powefully humble human being, who selflessly gave all that he had (his life!) to protect those students from that crazed gunman.
I love this work, how thoughtful and kind of you to write this about him and I hope he rests in peace.
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The poet has written a tribute with finesse,the rhyme scheme is uncompromized and the presentation perfect.Especially liked the phraseology of "you sacrificed the winter blossom of your life"A beautifully penned tribute for a man with a beautiful spirit.
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Aww This is Sad and sweet!!! I love it!!
♥--T.R;
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This poem is beautiful. Your rhyming is excellent, the best I've seen in this contest. Thank you so much for entering. Good luck.
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Thank you for your kind reward. "Liviu" was a hard poem to write but I was just captured by the spirit and humanity of this remarkable man. Thank you for the gold - I truly appreciate it and I am glad you enjoyed my poem. X
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Congratulations on your bronze trophy.
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This is a beautiful piece of poetry. It really told me about the man in a way that the news had not. Thanks for sharing. Love and Peace, Charlene.
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Thank you so much. I am really glad you liked my poem. Love Stephanie
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Another wasted life thanks to American lack of gun control. How ironic that someone who survived so much should fall victim to random violence engendered by a more violent and lawless society than either Hitler's Germany or Ceaucescu's Romania.
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Thank you for this wonderful tribute to a man who face down pure evil twice in his lifetime. Very well penned!
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Beautiful tribute
This is very touching. It is every teacher's heart to give their best to each of their students. This gentle soul gave them his ultimate best.
Thank you for penning this piece.
- joanne
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beautiful thoughts for such an extraordinary man!!!
YES!!! You completely gave this Brave man so much Justice for the life he has lived!!!! Your a beautiful soul Stephanie, a true walk of Life!!!
Love
ya,
bri.
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Your name means "Lily"
Flower of peace
Your floating soul
is now released
what agreat way to end this poem. I loved how you paid tribute to this extrordinary soul. He is so worthy of all this praise and more. Thank you for sharing. Peace and light, Kendal
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what an incredible man. when i heard this story i was really touched. this was a great eulogy to him. the wording was beautiful and it was a really great statement. good luck in all your writes!
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Once again you have penned a masterpiece. This heroic man gave the ultimate and your tribute to him is wonderfully written. Mysty Rain
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I hadn't heard about this heroic man before, unsung hero of that terrible day. You've written so eloquently of him, your words paying solemn tribute.
We're put upon this earth for reasons, one of his was to be here for that young person, to protect with his life so that person could go on with theirs.
In his picture he looks so understanding, caring, his eyes reflecting what you've written in your poem.
It's beautiful and I wish you the best in the contest
Dee
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A very touching tribute and dedication to true hero who restored our belief in the inherent goodness of the selfless 'human' spirit when faced with an act of inhuman, cold and robotic barbarity.
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I only hope the selfless act this man has shown us all is something that is long remembered. He gave his all for his students... he gave his life. Wonderful tribute!
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A heart-warming tribute...
You scripted an endearing memorial for this true martyr. He paid the ultimate price to save many lives. In times of great anguish, these heroes give of themselves without hesitation. This MAN represents the good that man can accomplish. Your lyrics are infused with a caring spirit and your love. Fabulous work of art, Stephanie.
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