The scars have faded
to nothing more than a dull memory
the blades long rusted
the needles have all been lost
the smile on his face
has long out-lived its time
hes running in (((circles)))
...the story of his life,
as he slowly takes the jewelry
off in front of the mirror
his permanent necklace; a constant reminder;
...[have.the.courage.to.push.down.next.time]...
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Locked in her room,
fingertips pressed [tight] to photographed lips
tears in her eyes,
shes lost all that she ever was,
in a matter of seconds,
life lost its purpose,
as she took down the message...
a (funeral) date
*he promised he was alright
as she stands in front of the ]open[ casket
&& stares -directly- into what used to be her life,
her best friend, her buddy, her pal
.............."you promised you'd never leave my side".....
Author notes
(14 - 17)
this isnt so much about love as it is about friendship. sorry if it comes across as a love poem.
A contest entry
- {Do you blush?} Rounds contest. [First round] by Naridill.
380 points, ended May 29, 2007, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I loved it! I am so glad that your style is interesting but not over the top. And the poem was brillant aswell.
Thanks for entering.
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i love it!!! ^^^^^ '
*he promised he was alright
as she stands in front of the ]open[ casket
&& stares -directly- into what used to be her life
.............."you promised you'd never leave my side".....' Your so good! great write =]
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Wow..
This is amazing.
I love it.
I like the way it tells the story of both people. It makes it more interesting and shows alot more emotion. Aww.. the end line made a tear come to my eye. It's so sad =[
Well done!! I love this poem ^.^
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