Beauty comes from within
each time the wind blows
it shows what you're really like
Your hair moves in the breeze
your expression is grim
as you stare at the mountains above
People may not think you're pretty
but you know inside
you're the most beautiful person in your life
Your eyes tell a lot about yourself
squinting into the sun's rays
they sparkle brightly
Beauty comes from within
each time the wind blows
it shows what you're really like
A contest entry
- Picture Options by WarmHeartedGeisha.
425 points, ended May 9, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Thank you! I know what you mean. That just happens to be your favorite part
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wow this is awesome! 'your eyes tell alot about yourself
squinting into the sun's rays
the sparkle brightly' is my favourite paragraph in your poem, but by saying that i'm not meaning that don't like the rest of the poem aswell, I think it is wonderful! I loved your poem, well written!
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ok. Thank you. l will fix it
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your/you're
your = possessive
you're = abbreviation for 'you are'
There are a lot (alot)of places where this difference needs to be clarified.
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Thank you all! I'm so glad you love it. I hope I do well in the contest too.
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good write
I enjoyed this poem very much... I this it was an expressing a great deal of emotion and inner thought... I gave great pleasure while reading.... Thank for these lovely words.. -
Wonderful write Mem. I love this, its flows very well ^_^
P.S. I give this three applause -
Aww....this is cute. I totally believe this and it really is true. Nice write, I LOVE it. Good luck in the contest!
<3 Jenerali
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